ginny is just a slightly better version of lavender
still insecure and posessing
it does feel like no girl has an actual change because the autor has already made up his mind that hermy and harry are going to end up together. even if ginny would be the perfect match she would not have a real shot

i havent read the chapter entirely yet but i mean... harry potter the boy who lived took something he thought was very pretty as revenge and placed it in hermiones trunk cause he thought she would be above suspicion. surely for somebody who has done britain such a service of getting rid of a dark lord one can look the other way now that hes done something stupid.
who would sentence him to anything? maby a couple of detentions xD

I have been binge reading your stories—as you may know if you check the comments—but this was the first one where you made me absolutely loathe both the plot and Hermione—not enough to stop reading it though.

The Animagus transformation having so much of an effect on personalities made Hermione act OOC even with your backstory for her. And she was an even worse Mary Sue than Captain Marvel and still had all the annoying traits of canon Hermione (from the books), just amplified tenfold. Apparently, a little kid—she is still an early teen when she starts—can steal from the most protected places in the entire country yet none of these 'impressive security measures' have been breached. If it was this easy to break into the 'most protected manors' without willing insider help, Wizarding Britain would become an anarchy. There is a reason why the gold in the federal reserve is secure, and it's definitely not due to the fact that a teen can break in, but no one has simply thought of it. Also, the crazy cat lady parts were too close to Umbridge to be anything but creepy. Also, while some elements in your other stories, they were generally minor enough to ignore in favour of the—usually good—plot, but this is your first story where the plot was completely based on your MC being a Mary Sue.

Also, Dumbledore. While I agree sacrifices are required to win a war, there is *absolutely* no reason to recruit a recently disgraced 12 year old as a thief, when you know she will take any and every opportunity to harm those who set her up—no matter the costs to herself. He already had an established thief in Mundungus and I refuse to believe that Fletcher would not have a *single* trusted person who would be able to help him in his work. It is often said, "A coincidence/accident can certainly harm your character, but not (at least regularly or for big things) help your character." A lot of HPMOR's–plot related–criticism comes from the fact that Harry is an overconfident idiot who never learns his lesson—and I believe the same thing can be said here. All Hermione's successes come from the enemy being too stupid to see through her *oh so clever!* plans that only she has thought of and *no one else ever* has been able to think of them. This is ironic despite the fact that you quote "Never count on your enemy making a mistake" almost fanatically in the story.

And Harry. I can't even begin to describe how you basically murdered his character and turned him into some sort of plaything for the sake of advancing Hermione's plot. Has extremely rigid morals and doesn't even tolerate his godfather 'protecting' him, but is suddenly A-Okay with someone who thinks robbing people blind is acceptable for a false accusation. Not to forget the fact that person is supposed to be one of his closest friends and he suddenly decides to forgive her just because the make-up sex is good? I'm not sure what your thought process was while writing that part—or maybe I'm just too petty—but when someone close to you betrays everything you believe in—here, the rule of law—you cut contact with them and not go and fuck them. Though, with the way Hermione was set up as a Mary Sue, I should have realised every character—literally; Harry agrees with her crimes; Old families have vaults able to be looted by a teen; Dumbledore trains a 12 year old as a 'professional thief'—rolling over for her would be par for the course.

Note: This was something that I needed to get out after reading 600k words of it. And, before you say, I know nobody forced me to read it, I did it willingly. I just wanted to get rid of my frustation.

Coooolll. While I suspected Mundungus would be involved in some way. I didn't expect him to come and lure her—all the while wearing expensive muggle clothes of all things.

Either way, off to a good start—as usual of course.

Thanks a lot for your effort! Great job.

Wonderful story. So many people complained about Hermione's characterization that I was hesitant to read this even though it was recommended multiple times and am I ever glad I eventually got around to reading it. I don't see any issue with how she is portrayed and the story is brilliant.

Thoroughly enjoyed this story, really liked the fantastic plot, how edge of your seat exciting it was anticipating if Hermione would be caught, how very clever her strategies were when they were playing out. Loved how balanced everyone was and really cared about the characters, particularly Mundungus, I think that's the first time I've read a story where he's a well rounded and thought out character.
Brilliant work! Thank you so much for sharing.

Is Voldemort so narcissistic that he's monologuing to himself?!

By the way, you hit 1,300 reviews on November 9th, 2020. Congrats for reaching 1,400 reviews on December 8th, 2024!

Nice of the boys to forward old spell books to Hermione, but can she even still do magic, especially as she is Muggle-born and now expelled? Don't you have your wand broken in half when you're expelled from Hogwarts?

That's right. We never really consider how Remus could have been there for Harry in his childhood, but his 'furry little problem' kept him away. He could have visited the boy during other parts of the lunar cycle, though. Not during the full moon...

Whoa! What an opening! Hermione expelled? What a way to hook a reader!

This kiss at the end was EVERYTHING!

the entire premise of this story is beyond contrived and nosedived directly into bad writing a few paragraphs in.

Such it always goes. An interesting premise, with a romantic tumor in the lungs that grows and grows. Damn you.

thank you