Making your oc overpowered immediately is lame. Seriously learn some world building and be less edgy that’s it really. Because of that though I’m not continuing your story simply because I’ve seen stories like this over and over again, yours just happens to have effort put into it, do consider being less edgy.

Came for a good gamer mc in dxd just got some confusing shit that doesn’t try to make sense why even bother with the worm or whatever you im trying not to just only complain but this fic just doesn’t make sense of follow its own plot

I won’t lie the corta or whatever his name was just didn’t really cut it as a big bad the story it self is all over the place I’m really not sure if this even make sense anymore

Why run? Use your f**king power, moRon! Latch onto him with your absorption gear and use Life Drain at the same time. Take that Power of Destruction for yourself! Quest beaten and you become the new Satan.
I really f**king hate stupid MCs. Queue shitty ass music for the f**king stupid chase scene.
Dropping this.

RANT TIME: What do you mean he can walk around and not gain attention? HE'S DRESSED AS A F**KING NAZGHUL FROM LOTR WITH HEAD TO TOE BLACK ARMOR AND EVERYTHING AND NO ONE MENTIONS IT AT ALL!
It's so f**king stupid!
Why does he keep going to the school? He's not a f**king student! He's a f**king trespasser! He is literally breaking the law every f**king time he steps onto school grounds!
WHY THE F**K DID HE LET ASIA BECOME A F**KING DEVIL WHEN HE WAS SUPPOSED TO SAVE HER FROM THAT FATE? He failed his mission, you stupid moRon!
Timeline out the window? YOU'VE BEEN FOLLOWING IT RELIGIOUSLY, YOU F**KER! You haven't changed a single f**king thing that happened! Issei became a devil! Asia shows up! They have a date! The confrontation at the church! Asia becomes a devil! Jesus f**king Christ! What was the f**king point of writing all of that and adding a new person if everything still f**king happens?

What the f**k was that shit?
Stop with the f**king music prompts. You break the flow of the story, you f**k!

What a f**king moRon. His life is sitting at 4. F**king 4! He had 50 f**king points to spend and didn't put any at all into it! How f**king stupid is that? He f**king deserves to f**king die as soon as he stubs his f**king toe because that's all it will take to kill the stupid f**k.

It's always a bad sign when half or more of a chapter is just text describing skills and the other half isn't much better as far as pacing goes. The MC also seems to be bi-polar and jumps from a honorable sacrifice to a murder hobo in half a chapter. I generally like op gamer fics but I tend to prefer a bit of build up and see the MC use those early skills rather than jump straight into max leveled skills for unique classes/jobs and never use even a third of said skills, whats the point in writing up skills if they are never brought up again? Just to fill up word count? Lazy.

there was literally no reason to threaten them... yet

affinity shouldn't do that shit. that just means a toddler with higher affinity to the power of destruction could just wave of sirzechs attacks...

trash

dropped because of all the emo shit, either make him dark or make him good, but this split personality crazy shit trying to take over and all the rest of the emo shit is just making the story.. bleh

All that build up for nothing… I could ignore the spelling errors and the incorrect punctuation. What I can’t stand for is the fact that your MC is so pathetically weak even at level 1000. How the fuck is his HP only barely hitting 10k? He keeps talking about how broken and OP he is but still gets fucking folded.

...wtf is this shit ?

I love sans powers