You made his wingspan stupid. 5 times the body length is absurd and He'd look ridiculous in flight.

You really need to continue your rewrite of this since as it is now it makes no sense.

Was able to read up to 15 chapters and couldn’t continue. The whole encounter with Harry and Sirius is mixed up doesn’t make sense where they meet. The realtionship between daphne and harry is poorly done. Forcing them together by some instant bond through Harry animal transformation does not make it a good romance. Not to mention they obviously have feelings for each other and haven’t confessed why drag it out. Not a fan of having multiple magical animals around him. Would have been fine with just his thunderbird along with hedwig not to mention the werewolf incident was unnecessary. Harry could make a wizards oath to easily prove his innocence about not putting his name in the cup. I understand Ron being immature and bigoted but hermione? Yes she looks towards people who are teachers or in spots of powers but she’s smart enough to realize not everything they say is right along with she shouldn’t be so against Slytheirn. Story just ain’t my cup of tea and i think needs a rewrite.

You really need to post an image of that staff. I don't think your written description is... very clear. Especially in the placement of that "silver disc..."

you seem to have had the Boggart lesson appear twice...

you are still writing

please return to this story soon

good luck

Please update this story is really good.

i'm not sure if you will ever finish this story but i do hope so because I really love it !

Love this story. Daphne and Harry are great in this. More chapters please

Please update great story

It was fun to read.. but do note that the first 5 chapters are complete trash but ignore those and the story gets better later.

Honestly this romance between Daphne and Harry is cheap and horribly done. Cause you are to lazy to actually build something you do this beast within bullshit and basically force the romance to happen.

Fuck guy and fuck your prophecy that was way to long. The prophecy was simple truly unnecessary and I’m tired of you fuckers constantly trying to change a plot so much that it’s a different story. If you want to do that shit stay out of fanfiction no one is coming here to rea d about people with familiar names doing things well outside of what’s possible and established. This prophecy is retarded and unnecessary and I hate you.

God the boggart lesson is always trash cause drama always has to go down.

Snape was a spy for both sides a double agent if you will cause he is a confirmed member of the order which he only joined to protect lily.