Reviews for Athena's Campione
naritaluv chapter 1 . 10/25
it sounds interesting. please try continuing this fic! it would be interesting since instead of alaya shirou would be contracting his soul to athena. chapter 1 . 10/4
Interesante historia espero ver como se desarrollará los siguientes capítulos .
Athena tendrá la apariencia de rider eso ya es fijo no ? ; una pregunta athena tendrá los Fantasmas noble de rider , lancer y avenger ?. Esa es mi pregunta ; creo que si ella consigue esos fantasmas nobles sería genial . Y ella y shirou serían un equipo de tener en cuenta .
Sería bueno que hagas que athena y shirou creen su propio grupo independiente ( Pls que algunas de las diosas de f/go aparescan en tu historia Pls ).
Bueno esa es solo mí opinión personal espero que no te aya molestado .
XXX Chaos Breaker XXX chapter 1 . 9/22
It very interesting idea that would great to see more of but maybe it would be better if shiro protect Athena because she about to die instead of paying her back it would fit there characters more and your story idea better if they keep saving each other life then slowly grow closer from it, but this is just a idea still hoping to see more of the story
7thManiac chapter 1 . 9/19
Well, well, what an interesting idea! Hopefully someone will pick it up, gods know I have enough trouble with my stuff.
nullstudent chapter 1 . 9/19
Question, wouldn't the incantation of Unlimited Blade Works be different for Shirou now, since she was saved by Athena?, also I'm assuming that the voice calling out to Athena is Medusa(Rider) am I right?
KhanhM chapter 1 . 9/17
I'll only follow the story for now. It's not because of your writing, it's just that I dislike Heaven's Feels route Shirou.
lordorphen17 chapter 1 . 9/15
i liked :D
The Joining chapter 1 . 9/15
Huh. You know, we kind of like this idea. The connection between Rider and Athena would be interesting to explore, the prompt is short but decently written, and a Campoine/Heretic God partnership would add to the dynamic of the other Campoines well and, if We do say so, fits with Shirou's personality to help others and Athena's manipulation for strength.

The transition of Shirou gaining the ability to use Unlimited Blade Works could probably be reworked a bit and spaced out when someone writes it, but overall We find the prospect of Shirou/Athena tag team to be an enjoyable idea. We get the feeling that it will inevitable turn into a romance, but since this is Heaven's Feel one would probably have Shirou be loyal to Sakura and Athena having a crush on him; a perfectly fine idea.

Overall, despite there not being much of it due to being a prompt, we would be delighted if someone of decent capability took up this story. The growing interaction between these two characters alone would be engaging if done correctly.

We will be watching.

-The Joining
ultima-owner chapter 1 . 9/15
eating arm gave her more divine power not how to use UBW, like you said. she has the knowledge but not the right skills to use it. I hope that clears up the confusion that fellow readers might have.
Guest chapter 1 . 9/15
Good. GOOD. This is a GREAT idea. Original, I don't remember seeing something like this. Continue the story and write this story in the way you want to go.
Im a guest chapter 1 . 9/15
Interesting. Rip The sekeri crossover.
Guest chapter 1 . 9/15
This is interesting concept if you give Shirou the soul of the dragon would that mean he gets a magic core like saber? Also nice idea about rider Athena wonder if she'll take her form also can you make sure sakura has a happy ending please she has the worse out of the fate girls
PasiveNox chapter 1 . 9/15
It's great? Yeah
The Rupture chapter 1 . 9/15
Athena can actually swallow steal bro just like metis did to Perseus in canon.
So is this a AthenaxShirou pairing, if it is you need to find a way to remove shirou love to sakura since its for her sake that shirou of HF fought very hard to the point that he is almost consumed by archers arm.
The Rupture chapter 1 . 9/15
Wow that pretty interesting and amazing for prologue, now I can't wait the actual start of the story.
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