Hi, What about Jon discovering the secrets of Winterfell? He is so focused on everywhere else but Winterfell his home

Really a very good story and i hope this continues. My only critique is i wish system updates and stats didnt take up so much of the text.

Thank you for the chapter it was great

I see why you gave him 5 lives

I love

happy new year

I love this fiction and hope you continue it :)

oooh i love Jon Marjorie and incant wait for theyre true adventure to begin, i want Jon to visit Dorne and for it to be revealed that he killed the mountain, allies all the way

rubies do not float, nor do rocks or chunks of iron

There’s a section after a gamer blurb that you left bolded, but otherwise this chapter looks and felt great to read!

Good read so far, but i think i have the same concerns as others for the pacing. You seem to be over-preparing for future content and continually reminding the reader (or Jon as he remembers) of all the quests and objectives. These first 10 chapters are almost entirely monologuing. I get the stylistic choice of wanting as much to be laid out before he gets going, but it reads as nonstop planning and explaining every thought that crosses his mind. A little too much "telling" and not enough "showing." This is burnout writing unless you're a machine and plan to make this until a 1MM word count super story. Regardless, concept is good and I'll withhold further thoughts until I catch up with the current progress.

oh and how ive reached the end... oh the misery! the shame! the cruel fates above! send me back to another life, one where this story is finished! thats all i ask! good job though

wont lie, id love for him to be with margary, i like the little crush thing going on with the princess but nah... let robb have her if anything or make the dorne romance actually work. im for team margary, and love the new passion between them.

Thank you so much. Its always a pleasure to see an update for this story. Also, hears hoping that after Jon's fifth death he wakes up in another setting for a jump chain lol. And, more interesting for it because I doubt that he will want that at all, but won't be able to stop himself from trying to help people.

Great chapter!

Hopefully the dragon she is referring to is Aurion's dragon, still living in the depths of Valyria itself. By this point it would rival Balerion in size, perhaps even greater!