Reviews for Thunderstorm |
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68967484848 chapter 9 . 12/6/2018 So sorry for the late review! Great chapter and I can't wait for more! |
ViolaHarmony chapter 9 . 11/28/2018 Interesting... I like to imagine that the bros. father (or maybe grandfather) left Italy to escape Mussolini's regime. It was nice to see a softer side to Count Bleck. I guess he's still just Blumiere deep down... I really liked the scene with Mario, Peach and Bowser. Especially Bowser's little pep talk at the end. ;) Great Chapter! I love how you write the interactions between characters. You're such a talented author! |
Radio Fanfiction chapter 9 . 11/23/2018 Spicy! I'm just gonna leave Frankie Valli's 'I love you baby' here and skedaddle. Toodles! |
NormanWhitesmith chapter 9 . 11/21/2018 I'm excited to see what's next! You nailed the joke at the beginning and I thought you handled the serious topic at the end well. I also like the L talking in an american accent headcannon. I can't wait to see more! |
Pikminfan chapter 9 . 11/21/2018 Great job and Happy Early Thanksgiving! |
HaruKin chapter 1 . 11/18/2018 This fic is awesome. Kdndieks |
68967484848 chapter 8 . 11/14/2018 Glad to see this back! Can't wait for more! |
NormanWhitesmith chapter 8 . 11/12/2018 You've still got it. I felt like I was in the story the entire time! I wonder how dynamics will change between the minions because of L and Dimentio's relationship in future chapters. I can't wait to see another chapter! You're an amazing writer! |
SpaceDimentio chapter 7 . 5/7/2018 SpongeBob reference? Guess it went over my head :P Aww, does someone miss his boyfriend? Oh, so Dimension D is like a Holodeck, is it? That's neat. Is the game of tag going to be exclusively in Dimension D then? Jeez, I don't think L would let him do that except that he badly wants to remember things, like who let's some smiley boi into their head just like that Oh baby! Some fluff! I am die for fluff Oh, uh oh, that's certainly not what you wanna wake up to; I wonder if Dimentio would also like Luigi too Oh my Grambi, that's so cute! I might be dead now |
SpaceDimentio chapter 6 . 5/5/2018 Sorry for the extremely late review Man, it would be nice if coming out of the closet was that easy and unremarkable for everyone Cont Bleck: Blowng up the world is ok but GRAMBI HELP YOU IF YOU SAY HECK Lol Mimi might just be jealous, she was hoping to date L hmm? Nice of her to be completely supportive Ooh, so that's how it's gonna happen eh? Interesting. Sometimes I wonder if they got the Wario Waft from O'Chunks. He certainly did it first. And yay for T rating! Now you have the freedom to do a lot more things with your story. |
68967484848 chapter 7 . 5/2/2018 Great chapter! It was very well written and I look forward to more. |
ViolaHarmony chapter 7 . 5/1/2018 Good chapter! It was very well-written. The only error I noticed was that you said the bros were born “in wedlock” when I think you meant “out of wedlock”. “In wedlock” means a couple was married. If a baby is born “out of wedlock” it means the parents weren’t married. Oh no! O’Chunks! I have a bad feeling about this... I enjoyed the interaction between Mr. L and Dimentio. I think you wrote them very well. And Mr. L is completely adorable. :) That’s one thing he has in common with Luigi. They’re both adorkable! :D And Luigi made a small appearance! Dimentio better be careful! |
NormanWhitesmith chapter 7 . 4/29/2018 You know, for where Mario and Luigi grew up, I'm just going to imagine it like the neighborhood from Hey Arnold... This was a really good chapter and I see how you got the father's name from Nintendrawer. I like how you did the memory reveal thing and it was cool. Good thing Dimension D didn't make Mr. L 17 again, because boy would that be awkward (Mr. L with voice cracking on every word: Are you sure you aren't messing with me?). Unfortunately I didn't see the SpongeBob reference and now I feel bad. Overall, I like this and can't wait to see what will happen next. I can see dimentio as a prank forcing Mr. L into that scrapped memory you told me about with SBG because Mr. L was asking too many questions about his mom. The reactions would be hilarious. Then again, I should stop creating stories that I'm not even writing! Overall, you're doing great, especially if you read this entire pointless ramble. Can't wait for the next chapter! |
Pikminfan chapter 7 . 4/29/2018 Great job! |
ViolaHarmony chapter 6 . 4/22/2018 I liked how you snuck in some Luaisy there. ;) Mimi and Mr. L are really cute as friends! It was hilarious when she mimicked Dimentio and Mr. L! It was fun to see things from Mario’s perspective for a little while. Of course he would worry about Luigi! He’s a good bro. Not a perfect one, but a very good one. ;) I liked that you addressed the three heroes’ thoughts on Mr. L’s identity. In the game, I think they’re completely oblivious. Which is hilarious, and perhaps necessary for certain plot points, but it doesn’t really make sense in a story like this one. It makes sense that they would notice the similarities to Luigi and ponder the reasons and possibilities behind them. I think Dimentio does care a little for Mr. L. Not enough to go back on his sinister plans for him, but still. I think it adds depth to his character, too, knowing that he may have conflicted feelings on what he’s going to do. |