lol i remember missing a job interview cause of this fic 3-4 years ago

“Goodbye D-Machine man.” Well, I think he was going to say goodbye Dad

GD. really committed to ensuring the MC never gets anything of his own. Every time he gets something some other schmuck shows up and copies it or is randomly gifted it by some mysterious figure.

Bruh

I think Arc 17 was perhaps the best Arc. I never really cared about Donna. Like, ever. She's always the background character when I read comics. But, holy shit, this was an amazing character arc for her. And with Jacob, I feel like he fit well in her story. I think I cried a little when Donna visited her mother.

no the lowest form of fanfiction is harem

Villain Team Up! Yay! Hope the Calculator and Blackfire take turns gangbanging Starfire while they make your pathetic cuck of an MC watch!

Good chapter and I can’t wait to see what happens next

good chapter

I caught the princess bride reference at the end their.

And blackfire lives! Unfortunately...

Red arrow is on the team and wants access to the finances and tech? That ain't good. Wonder what else was in those 'final' messages...

Great chapter!

Damn a princess bride reference, hehe.

You just DC’d the Princess Bride…and it was glorious! Noah and Blackfire, well it was the most logical team up from both a personality standpoint and a plot one given Machina and Starfire’s relationship. Beautiful, simply beautiful. Excellent work as always! Can’t wait for more!

Blackfire and Noah just being a chaotic bundle of pettiness and I love it. hopefully we get more on the aftermath of Kori and machia leaving next chapter.

KEEP BEING AWESOME!

This chapter is ridiculous. How forced do you want to make the main character a hero? I came into this knowing he would be one, but the way it was handled is honestly bad.

You could do with some touching up in the sales pitch bit between the Justice League and Jacob. Anyone could immediately tell the trap you were throwing Jacob into with Batman’s, “Why not?”

Jacob’s words don’t add up with what actually happened. He didn’t save Starfire because it was the right thing to do. He saw the most human thing in a slaughter pit, killed something attacking it, and didn’t even know if the thing he saved was the good guy or not.

He was confused, scared, and killing things for his life. He didn’t do a single thing because he thought it was the right thing to do.

Finally, Jacob comes off as a really whiney dickhead with that rant, “Aren’t you all supposed to save people?!”

I get what you’re trying to go for, but you did not execute it well in the slightest. A fair try, maybe, but not a good one.