|Reviews for Up Yours Dumbles|
| Marauder no. Five chapter 10 . 9/14/2020
so so tired but i had to finish it. i enjoyed this immensely. definitely loved the helmet pensieves - what a brilliant idea!
| gginsc chapter 7 . 9/2/2020
Why can't the Dumbles crew pop away? A snow storm should not be a problem for them.
| RinnaZevran1987 chapter 10 . 8/27/2020
| Vampireking40 chapter 6 . 8/19/2020
The part of the begging mentioning the Toad had she not yet been arrested by the Aurors when Snape asked her to help him get the snake parts back. The school finally got a good teacher and an american which does not make since seeing that we learn later on that Dumbledore does not hire american witches and Wizards. I guess he had to accept her as a teacher seeing she applied to the Board directly.
| Hawkbill666 chapter 10 . 8/15/2020
I have read this four times and still love it. Hope you write many more.
| Rodaani Stone chapter 10 . 8/4/2020
| PTHC.FFN.CAD chapter 10 . 8/2/2020
This is an okay story. The basic premise is simple but the execution is poor. Some of the plots are convoluted and reasoning behind it are even more outlandish (e.g., the time dilation and the time travel.) The "training montage" served a relative weak purpose but ultimately became of more distraction.
Some story elements are also unnecessary detailed that achieved even less in the story building (e.g., battleship, submarines & morality of hunting.) While those things might be what author personally enjoyed, but it is not explained as to why your Harry Potter enjoys those and also became a defender of it. These type of random add on elements detract and lose readers' interest.
Finally, there is a problem with tone / pace of the story. The most noticeable for me is the later confrontation with The Order / dinner / meet & greet /showing off / introduce muggle technology all in one chapter. It is jarring and confusing as to what the new Mr. & Mrs. Potters are up to.
Thank you for trying and sharing your work!
| Wolvie26 chapter 10 . 7/30/2020
| TMNTFanForever85 chapter 9 . 7/28/2020
Is it just me or is Hermione blinded about the wizarding world caused all caused she has never heard of the creatures that Luna talks about think they are made up I bet she never read every book on magical creatures that she could find or even asked anyone near her that knows about the magical creatures if they exists or not or never stop to even considered that Luna may have an hidden gift as abilities or may of been saying one thing but thinking of another like using creatures to covered up what she sees or was even affected by her mother's dead am thinking even if Hermione has read newt book on magical creatures he discovered may of though they were imaginary and I don't think she likes that family magics are secret to the families it's for not every singled think should be shared should even be dark family secrets I guess Hermione doesn't realised just how dangerous her wand can be or the fact most first years spells can be used for evil purposes like the spell to levitate can be used to dropped someone from top of the tower out a window the cutting curse to removed ppl heads from there bodies or even a ton of other stuff she is blind to. To bad no one though to have her casts spells she learnt during each year by casing them on training dummies to see what damages it can caused and the dangers it can have on a person or others
| TMNTFanForever85 chapter 10 . 7/28/2020
Love the story awesome job and very well written wished
Thier were more like this and the part about Dumbledore does explain alot and might be true I said he had a mix of depression, dementia, Alzheimer's disease, anxiety, bipolar disorder and schizophrenia from how he acted it was almost like he forgotten that harry was a living breathing child and treated him as a weapon and a pawn he treated everyone like they were chess pieces in wizard chess and him as the king in the game and though of himself in charge of everything let the power go to his head he was corrupted and lead others astray
| Matt chapter 5 . 7/18/2020
Your editor really fell down on the job with this chapter. There are so many spelling mistakes it's ridiculous.
| Matt chapter 4 . 7/18/2020
Apparently you don't know anything about the cause of bad vision. It's not about the optic nerve, it's about the shape of the cornea. That's how they're able to correct people's vision using lasers. They reshape the lens of the eye. It's why contact lenses work - they work with the natural lens of the eye to correct your vision. Regrowing the optic nerve would do nothing for Harry's vision. That would only help someone who was blind because of damage to their optic nerve.
| Hypatius chapter 10 . 7/19/2020
well that was a... summary, to not be rude.
| Mahruz Masrur chapter 10 . 7/15/2020
| jltavare chapter 10 . 7/13/2020
This was an absolutely great story!