tbh i thought Excalibur was already inside of Jaune, seeing how saber truned to dust and his aura glowed scene.

now, i think Jaune should hold the sword, its the last thing his mother used, and its kinda weird its in a random lake( or is it a power with wizard)

wait are author saying that someone banged the king of Britain!?

pretty good start.

The story was great but the ending was way too preachy and a little too one-sided towards Blake.

Magic Circuits are not apart or conected to the body they are connected the spirit if that wasnt the case Shirou wouldnt have any magic circuits in his doll body at the end of heavens feel.

I love the way you are writing Kirie especially what you did at the end

This was a very interesting read. Yet the part I enjoyed the most involved the Arc family with the whole war falling behund that.

Really wish to see more of the daily lives of the Arc family in some prequel.

a good read and definitely something that more people should read, also it just occurred to me is the reason why Jaune has so many siblings because Nicholas had to give Artoria several mana transfers

artoria*

Honestly one of the best stories I've read

Rereading this because it’s probably among my top 3 favorite fics on this site. IMO the little author’s note about the contender being here is funny, because the contender REALLY gets around throughout this story. Like iirc, there are like 4 or 5 different instances throughout the story where someone is shot with the contender, which is kind of a lot tbh.

Weiss kill yourself

Dang, Whitley isn't quite right but he really isn't wrong.

"But then, she thought of her father and brother. She wasn't even sure if she could call them family. They advised her, manipulated her, tried to turn her into a puppet for their own seriously gains and then locked her away when she refused to bend to their whims. They were destroying the name of the Schnee family. But at the end of the day, even if she disowned them, even if she despised them as the horrible human beings they were..."

God Weiss is insufferable in this. She keeps talking about her brother like he's done something bad to her or is responsible for her own choices and actions when he's done literally nothing. Bitch is delusional and needs a reality check. It would be a real shame if this fic let's this stand without her getting a major reality check. Hopefully someone calls her out for her prejudices. Her brother is literally just as abused as she is and get refusal to distinguish them as different people and accept that her YOUNGER brother is no more responsible for her father's actions than she is. Honestly, she's the one being a despicable human being here.

Sucks but Ruby is right that she got Pyrrha killed. Pyrrha wasn't really in any danger by the time Ruby arrived on the roof.

Wow this Pyrrha death (fuck you by the way) was sooooo much worse than her cannon one. I wonder if Jaune has her brain matter spattered all over himself grin when her head popped "like a watermelon."