Reviews for Moonlight |
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![]() ![]() ![]() The section with Ozpin makes no sense, unless you assume there's no actual point to the initiation and everyone who shows up automatically pass anyways. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, definitely surprise. I was just enjoying Percy Pyrha relationsship And they are getting parted. Thank you for your writing, I very much enjoy reading your writing style. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So far I love your story. Percy's musings are great and I like his not very changed personality. Thank you for your writing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Reread this fic and it still holds up to today! Absolutely love the close bonds, characterisation, how Percy clearly isn’t perfect. I do think his speed stats should be higher, his combat speed is around lightning timer levels, which is more than fast enough when against hunters. Please come back Greed! |
![]() ![]() ![]() he doesn't owe them any kind of explanation. doesnt make sense that he thinks he does |
![]() ![]() Okay first of all, fuck anyone who said bad shit about your story. I enjoyed this story a lot and I was disappointed it ended around this time last year. BRING IT BACK |
![]() ![]() I think you may have weakened percy a little too much, the dude took on an army of titans, Gods, monsters, and a Primordial, granted he didn't do it alone as he too had an army, but still. Beowolfs are basically the remanant version of mobs one step up from being slimes, and while they may have had a seemingly great number which as you said could take out fully trained huntsmen, but Percy Jackson is no mere huntsman, he is a Demi-God and possesses all the abilities and strengths that entails. However, I don't really have much knowledge about both series, so I could be overestimating his strength by a great deal, but I think it is reasonable that since this is post-war he should have nothing really resembling trouble dealing with that horde of beowolves, I could have seen him having the trouble he did or even worse if he was from much earlier in the series, but not now. Because the scary question I am now asking myself is this: If he is having THIS MUCH trouble against a horde of mere beowolves this early into the fic, then how the hell is he supposed to deal with the enemies that come later and are much stronger? I really don't want to invest time in reading a fic that would weaken (Nerf) the MC, by nature of being a preexisting MC we have great knowlege of just how powerful he is at that point in time before he got removing from canon and was dumped into remnant, and have him make extordinarily stupid decisions at critical shatterpoints in the plot, just for the sake of making an ultimately futile attempt at staying close to cannon in order to not have to work that much harder trying to come up with an unique approach to the plot. This review is just my first impression, I have not yet read beyond chapter one so I have really no idea if that will be the case, but I hope it isn't. That said, I will continue reading this fic until either I finish it, or something about the fic makes it's quality dive below my (personal) level of tolerance. Good day. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The story has been solid, I like the direction you took this chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The only way to salvage this is to avoid sending him back to Beacon, because if you do it'd be going to go against the kind of character you're painting. Can see why this is one of your unpopular stories |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well that escalated quickly. |
![]() ![]() ![]() "Mistralian Bad Boyz" Lmaoo. Nice Worm refference. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Beowolf* |
![]() ![]() ![]() age, confidence, and size* you forgot the , after and. |
![]() ![]() ![]() And accidently you spelt Beowolf as Beowulf. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You accidently spelt Beowolves as Beowloves |