Way to go on this story keep it going

Again, I'm coldblue2015. No longer will I be 'coldblue' anonymous reviewer.

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Again, thanks for such great stories you have written and I will be sure to review to them about them in the future as they update!

All your stories are great and so is this one keep it up man

There’s way to watch Knights of Sidonia if you’re interested go to “watchcartoononline” click menu, go to anime dub, and go to the K section. The Weirder Things is not that bad by the way

I think Patrick is cool

Can you also create Bleach x Knights is Sidonia crossover, there’s not many crossovers of Knights of Sidonia. Ichigo can replace Nagate and he is trained to be a knight and destroy the aliens and his robot can be painted with black and little yellow. Ichigo can also have like a small harem like: Izana, En Honoka, Sasaki, Samari, and Koybayashi

I have a few suggestions.

•First of all, age Patrick down one year. It’s a little unbelievable that a sixteen year old teen would (and this is if you decide to just make Patrick follow the twins around) just follow and ‘play’ with two preteens.

•Add your own plot. Put a spin the episodes and involve Patrick. I can tell you are making a relationship between Wendy and him happen. Make an actual build up and not just a few winks in between.

Maybe you can involve Patrick in the shadier things in Gravity Falls whether it is to protect the twins or just out of amusement.

•Also, don’t describe the way Patrick dresses. The whole reason people hate OCs is because they usually describe the authors. The only reason I haven’t left yet is because you only made one mistake with Patrick, and that was the hat. You don’t want your character to stick out negativly among the rest of the characters. Most characters wear one specific outfit throughout the show (except Mabel with her sweaters) so don’t describe Patrick as often. Do you see much other characters wearing your specific hat? There’s Dippers average baseball hat. Wendy’s lumberjack hat. Stan’s fez. But not much with a jungle hat. This was a bit of personal information that told us you were probably making Patrick a mirror of yourself.

Other than that, the structure of this story and the fact that you are not a f*cking imbecile like half of this community tells me that you can take this OC story great places.

This story is amazing keep up the good work

I got to admit that this was awesome and great start!

Right now with "Assassination Classroom" I'm in the beginning of Chapter 100s of the Manga. With the
'God of Death' Assassin/Flower Delivery man heating things up!

Patrick Pines:

Okay, he the oldest teen. It rather interesting to read what Patrick brings. I think Patrick is Support, Responsibility and Muscle. I notice a "Courage the Cowardly Dog", reference in this chapter. It rather interesting to read how Patrick and Wendy will start they're relationship. Maybe Patrick Pines will move to Gravity Falls and go to a Community College or find a job they're such as the Mysterious Shack or whatever? I find that it interesting that the SYMBOL you gave Patrick is the Question Mark, which means Patrick could replace Soos in the Zodiac to SEAL Bill Cipher away. Got to weapon for Patrick: Red Crowbar! I like the team up with Patrick and his younger Pine Twins cousins. I also have to admit that I hoped Patrick would have some ABNORMALITY or something similar to Staford Pines, but this is okay for now. Who knows? Maybe it will happen later. For now we have interesting character in the mix. I think "Weirder Things", Beginning and Ending parts were interesting. I just can't figure out where I seen/read how you did it before. I hope "Weirder Things", we can read the END of and have your first complete chapter.

By the way, your writing is good and I can tell you have been growing a little as writer from "The Red Dragon Samurai", "Welcome Back Mr. ED!", and now with "Weirder Things". Keep up the good work!

Questions

1) Will Patrick Pines stumble on the idea that Stan had a TWIN? Maybe Patrick has his own secret detective work on Stan Pines background?

2) Will we read moments of Patrick and Wendy getting closer? How will Robbie Valentio and Dipper Pines take this?

3) Does Patrick Pines have any interesting abnormalities or some skills? Does Patrick have something to give him a edge to help his cousins and take they're enemies by surprise?

4) Can Patrick Pine use more weapons besides Red Crowbar? Maybe have Patrick find ONE of Stanley Pines twelve guns or maybe even Patrick finding Stanford Pines lazer/quantum destabilizer guns?

5) Have you thought of Patrick Pines seeing/witnessing Gobblewonker and have his OWN secret photo of Gravity Falls Lake own mysterious creature?

6) Can you give us a hint of any possible Fan Fiction stories on your Profile/Homepage? Is it possible for a "Simpsons" or "Futurama" Fan Fiction story to have OC-Male character? Maybe even a "Pokémon" Fan Fiction?

Suggestions

1) That would bring DRAMA and shake the trust Patrick made with Dipper and Mable. Patrick responsible and cares for his cousins feelings. Plus, Patrick needs EVIDENCE for such a SHOCKING revelation that they're Grunckle Stan might not be Stanford Pines. I would find it interesting that Patrick Pines would stumble of Great Uncle Stanford Pines old photo books and find pictures of his family, including Stanely Pines. Maybe Patrick Pines would notice that Stanford Pines has SIX fingers and could possible be the author of Mysterious Books that Dipper and he found.

2) Yeah, I figure Dipper and Robbie would come into conflict with Patrick. It would be interesting to read that drama. I kind think Patrick Pines would win Wendy Corduroy over by giving her necessary space, comfort and show that Patricks does truly care for Wendy as person. Robbie and Dipper like Wendy for being attractive and cool girl. I would love that moments that Patrick looks to Wendy more than that. Possible even find Wendy realize she has strong feelings for Patrick. Still, I want Patrick and Robbie to have some confrontation, then Patrick and Dipper try to settle this issue themselves.

3) Maybe Patrick Pines can run for hours or not get super cold. We could also have Patrick have some survival/military training from Boot Camp. I don't know. I have no idea about Patrick Pines character. I went with Boot Camp for military training, but ONLY because the Forest Camo he wears. I would find it interesting if Patrick was capable of having ALOT of endurance/stamina or be able to survive harsh environments.

4) I think that literally a JOKE in "Gravity Falls" episode where Gruncle Stan is afraid of heights or being Crae-Crae, BUT has ALOT of guns. I think twelve Guns. Let not forget Stanford Pines and his Scifi weapons he developed. I figure Patrick Pines will clean around the Mysterious Shack, BUT find some weapons. I figure Patrick would use a Gun or Lazer Gun, in dangerous situations. Like the Gideon Mecha/Robot, Shape-shifter or the Demons during Weirdmegadon.

5) Sort of a special moment where Patrick Pines has his own special mysterious/weird adventure. It would be cool if Patrick knew that the Gobblewonker existed and had a photograph to PROVE it, but keeps it secret as his own special memorial moment. Of course, you could explore that Patrick Pines and Gobblewonker could know each other and have special bond. You could go the "Free Willy" or "Sea Horse" movies route, which Patrick Pines saves the Gobblewonker and in return the Gobblewonker looks out for Patrick Pines in the future.

6) Yeah, I'm hoping for that. It sad that such interesting Adult Cartoons such as "The Simpsons" and "Futurama", they're not really ANY good Fan Fiction. I would hope you make ONE of these OC-Male based story in either "The Simpsons" or "Futurama". Of course, maybe you like "Pokémon" and would try that. I would be interesting to read what your OC-Male in "Pokémon" would be like; if you follow the Cartoon, Anime, Game or Manga; and what your Pokémon DREAM team would be like.

Just write down a LIST of possible Fan Fiction/Crossover stories on the bottom like you have been. I can't wait to read the Summary/Introduction idea of "Ghost in the Shell", "Naruto", or "The Loud House" that has a Male OC shaking up the story/plot of these Animes/Cartoons we love.

Keep up the good work and thanks for creating this story!