Reviews for Adversity Breeds Excellence |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Superb, a fantastic story that I hope against hope you may continue one day. |
![]() ![]() ![]() By the time you wrote this chapter I'm pretty sure J.K.R had already said that wands are only popular in Europe and America and that everywhere else on the planet, As in like 90% of the magical world prefer to use Wandless magic. They only see ones as a useful tool but they don't depend on it even their magical schools all teach their students to be masters Wandless magic. And yes they can use complex magic and everything else it makes no sense that they would be unable to Fully utilize a power they are born with that falls through every single cell in their body without relying on an outside object that is dumb. Granted the downside of not relying on a wound is that it may regulating magical use much more difficult |
![]() ![]() ![]() Limited money? I believe the description was hills and hills of galleons mountains of sickles and columns of knuts and that is limited money? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Every time I read a fan fiction where they talk about the laws regarding underage magic and every one of you idiot said the same stupid c*** oh it's so unfair. How is it on fair? The tiniest bit of critical thinking would allow you to see that the law makes perfect sense why would they allow muggleborns to be able to freely use magic? Where do muggleborns live it's literally in the name their parents are muggles they live in the muggle world the entire point of the statue of secrecy is to keep muggles from seeing magic who in the hell in their right mind would allow a bunch of teenagers in the mother world to freely I have access to magic that is stupid. If the law did not work the way it did then muggleborn's would have already caused a statue of secrecy to become undone because of their stupidity there would be a renew of the war between magicals and muggles all because of muggleborns which is originally the reason that the blood supremacy believes started in the first place that's why Salazar slithering did not like muggleborns he Saw them as the greatest security risk That they were nothing but spies waiting to happen because in such a war who would they choose their muggle parents or There fellow witch and wizards? And honestly even if you don't want to think about such a clearly logical reason for not allowing them to use magic outside of school. Think about it this way since they have no magical family there wisdom as those born in the magical world do what happens if this muggleborn makes a mistake with their magic and causes a mess that they are unable to fix? What if they mess up a spell with horrible consequences but once again they have no magical father or mother or both or other magical family members to undo the mistake they have made I highly doubt the minister of magic wants to waste their time going around every day all day oblivion to c*** out of muggles or undoing the messes made by Moga borns so yes the law is not unfair it makes perfect sense if they have a problem with it then Mongolians should move to the magical world or ask to stay at hogwarts all year round. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really hate when authors make dumb changes that make no sense why are you weakening the spells canon? Fiendfyre Does not work that way it is just as quick to use as most of the other spells we're seeing in Harry Potter it requires no long-term and it certainly does not require any you need tramp from Each witch are wizard that use of it that is stupid. Also if you've read the books or even watch the c***** movies you would have seen that fi reworks quite quickly the moment he unleashed it they would have consumed the entire house him along with it it wouldn't take that long to consume the entire neighborhood it moves quite Quickly and the more it consumes the bigger the flames grow the hotter day grow and the faster it moves not to mention the sentience that the flames have specifically targets live in creatures it would not go burning wood first of all it would go directly for All of the living creatures around it above anything else including its caster. Also if you did a little bit of research before you decided to write this you would know that fiend fire has 2 charms specifically meant for it want to shrink the flames and want to completely extinguish them you're telling me that the order members have been fighting voldemort for how Long now and dumbledore wouldn't have taught all the other members the 2 counter charms 2? Also it's so obvious that whole situation would flur with just done for the sake of shock value and drama you're telling me that this death eater Has enough time to say our whole sentence and yet Harry is going to focus on the fire rather than focus on the death eater that is just standing there frhe's not gonna put his attention on the death eater but focus on the fire from burning down some houses but not the death eater that can attack him okay sure that makes perfect sense |
![]() ![]() ![]() So for what reason author is Harry even waste his time going with the Dursleys in the first place? I see no reason why he didn't just tell them to f*** off and go find a place at the leaky caldron before finding himself somewhere else. Send a letter to Sirius That he will not be going back to his mumble relatives and ask them if the blacks have any homes because I'm quite sure they should have multiple of them I don't see why they would have only one house as wealthy as they are. It always baffles me when you guys want to make Harry start making smart decisions and yet you keep having to make the dumbest one of going back to his muggle relatives. That right there was always one of the biggest crocodiles in the Harry Potter books you find out that you are wealthy and you already have the ability to live on You're owned because your relatives turned you into their personal slave for the first 10 years of your life and you decide to keep going back to them for what when you already have the means to go live on your own simply because I'm manipulative old man who's never Ever ever done a single thing in your life to help you keep telling you to go back because it's the safest place for you and you just believe that s***? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I swear whenever he stores like this that age up the characters without sinking about the repercussions of this for instance since Harry's 18 why exactly is he still with the darliest in the model world he can go live on his own. You expect me to believe that Harry is going to believe dumbledore's b******* rather than go get his own home and use that gold in his vote to have his home warded? How is the blood ward still acting with Harry bean 18? Are there other schools that teach Wizards and witch is in the magical world since you start hogwarts at 15 which you skipped over a whole lot of important years where teenagers are most recipient to new information those are the years where learning is the easiest. Important world building aspects like that that is affected by the aging up characters to a point where you're comfortable with them having sex ( Since I see no other practical reason for you to change their age from the books in the first place) yet you don't think about the wider repercussions of doing so, it's pretty dumb. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story, i hope you get back to it |
![]() ![]() ![]() Somehow I knew this would be the case, the story was just starting to pick up steam and then it stopped getting updated. The sad thing is Harry and company never even made it to Hogwarts because the pacing was too slow. You still could have done the day-to-day thing but there was no reason for those days to be set so closely together. Like I said in an earlier review, it took you twenty some odd chapters to make it to Harry's birthday. This meanls it took roughly over 100k words to cover a month and some change in the story. It's no wonder that you got burnt out with this story, it would take you over a million words to cover sixth year at that pace. The story does still have immense potential so far; the pairing is realistic (providing you didn't try and add Daphne and Tracy), there isn't unnecessary bashing, and you stayed true to the base material. If you ever do pick this back up again my advice would be to trim the fat first and foremost. Set your chapters at minimum one week apart (excluding big events of course) and try to summarize things that are important to the story but not important enough to dedicate a whole chapter to the event. Your dialogue is solid and the action scenes are done well though the fight scenes could benefit from a little less exposition during the heat of battle. Likewise with Harry's internal monolog in the middle of conversations most notably during his conversation with Dumbledore a few chapters back. I think at this point you would find it difficult for you to get back into the mindset for writing new chapters for this story after such a long hiatus, but I will keep a lookout for new chapters just in case. Thank you for sharing this story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Why wasn't Pettigrew charged for the murder of Cedric Diggory as well? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Converning your AN, after twenty-three chapters I would have expected to be at Hogwarts by now. The story is certainly dragging through the summer and it's not made it to Harry's birthday yet. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Neither of those stories you recommended were ever finished, if I remember correctly. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Gotta say that I like how you got rid of the scarcrux, it was very creative and preferable to Harry taking an AK to the face like in canon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Harry's what eighteen now? I remember you said the characters are aged up four years. Personally I don't see the point of arbitrarily changing his age if he is still under the same limitations as he was in canon but whatever. The reason I bring the age thing up now is because he is legally an adult in the muggle world, so why is he acting like a subservient bitch to his uncle? What is the benefit of aging him up if this is just the same as canon Harry only now he's even more pathetic since now he's an adult being treated like a house elf? I'm guessing the only reason you aged him up was to allay your conscience when you start writing fucky-fucky scenes with Fleur. That's cool and all but the change in age should come with added benefits to Harry otherwise this is canon Harry that's way too damn old to be taking shit from his uncle. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ilove this story and i hope that you are able to continue it |