|Reviews for Understanding|
| Ebony Starstorm chapter 1 . 6/29/2006
Bury our truth,
Humo noster verum-i
| Andrea D chapter 17 . 3/15/2004
To quote you, 'well, well, well,' what an interesting stopping-point. I, personally quite enjoyed this fic, although there are a few grievances I have, as always with any fic ;) Take everything I say with a grain of salt though, as I'm just one lone reader, of course.
First of all, excellent writing, I love your style, and you seem to express your ideas through the writing quite well, which is, to me, probably one of the most important things about good writing. However, in a few places, it got a bit choppy, and, though I believe I understood your point, I think a bit of different wording would convey what you're trying to get across more effectively. That, or I'm completely reading your meaning wrongly ;). Your vocabulary is extensive, so your fic is, in my opinion, one of those of the higher quality here on , so good job in that respect. However, I'm a bit averse to your characterisation of Snape, especially in the earlier chapters, as it seems unlikely that he would open up so quickly and easily and say so much intimate detail about himself in front of Hermione, who was, in fact, his student for so many years. He always struck me as a cold, sarcastic person, and one more difficult to crack than Hermione has been able to. Speaking of, there was a disappointing lack of sarcasm and irony on his part, in this, which, in my opinion, makes up for a lot of the mood in a Severus-fic.
It also seems a bit exaggerated that Hermione (I can't quite remember which chapter this was in), when left alone for a few hours, manages to figure out a plan to destroy the Dark Lord, simply using her DoM handbook. Surely, other Unspeakables would have thought to look through this? Of course, I know what you're thinking, the wand-core phenomenon is quite uncommon and not very largely known, but with that logic, wouldn't Dumbledore, who knew about the wand-cores long before Hermione Granger, be able to think of such a solution, as he is also an Unspeakable, and older and wiser to boot?
Another thing: Hermione transformed in a special way so that her animagus form would be translucent. If it is a known fact that this happens in those specific circumstances, you would think that any aspiring animagi would want to do the same thing in order to have that added benefit. I'm sure Snape, for instance, would have researched just as much as Hermione before he learned to transfigure himself...
Which brings me to another point. When Hermione was stuck in the cell, imprisoned by Macnair and Voldemort, Severus quickly rescued her and was able to promptly transfigure her into her animagus form. Now, call me stupid, but that seems like a pretty advanced, if not impossible, piece of transfiguration! But Severus pulled it off as if it was simply an everyday spell. That, however, isn't a large problem, as he is a very powerful wizard indeed, so this...stumbling block is probably fine to stand as it is, especially if it was written that way by design, in which case I do understand your point. ;)
Hermione, also, has a rather flawed characterisation in my opinion...smells suspiciously like a Mary Sue. As mentioned previously, she was quickly able to develop the perfect plan to destroy Voldemort, she herself destroyed Voldemort, not to mention several other parts of her character that seem just a little too perfect...Of course, I used to be guilty of the same thing in my writing, I almost can't bring myself to point out faults in the characters I know and love, and, from one writer to another, I'm sure you feel the same way ;) I find it useful to make a character chart, in which I basically write down all the traits I want to expand upon, so as to make my character more three-dimensional, instead of just one-sided and flat, as we see too often in fanfiction writing. Not that you're guilty of it, by any counts ;).
And, although I know this fic was written before Order of the Phoenix was published, this also seems too important to not bear mentioning: the prophecy says that Harry is to be the one to destroy Voldemort himself. Now, of course, you could still go the way you have, since Voldemort isn't dead, simply without his magical powers after Hermone's 'interference,' but it would still seem a little awkward in my opinion.
Otherwise, excellent writing, I quite enjoyed this piece of fanfiction, and your use of the first-person made a refreshing change from the ordinary. Thank you for this interesting reading experience!
With that in mind, I look forward to hearing more from you, please expand upon this fic so that all of us who are eagerly awaiting the ending can be happily satisfied ;) ;)
Just my two cents (looking back, an awful LONG two cents...I always seem to write overly detailed reviews)
| Louise Luvgood chapter 17 . 8/11/2003
i love this story so please finish it. I know it can be hard but PLEASE FINISH IT.
| Heteroclite chapter 17 . 7/25/2003
Love it! Great story line and i love the way that Snape was a spy all along. Snape being an unspeakable was a stroke of genius! Hes just the kind of person who would work for the Department of Mysteries! Love the S/H action and cant wait to read the next chapter ur definately on my favourite stories list!
| wrenbirdy chapter 17 . 6/26/2003
Just finished your fic thus far! It is very good! I look forward to the ending! Keep up the good work!
| Beanie chapter 17 . 6/17/2003
ARGH! HOW COULD YOU STOP THERE? I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE HURRY UP AND GET THE NEXT CHAPTER OUT MY VERY SANITY DEPENDS ON IT! THIS IS THE GREATEST FIC I HAVE EVER READ SO PLEASE HURRY TO UPDATE IT!
| ChishionoTenshi chapter 17 . 6/8/2003
Whoosh. So Hermione had a phoenix feather too? Interesting.
| DragonFireAngelVWP chapter 17 . 6/6/2003
Sorry I didn't review sooner. I have been busy with final exams. I am afriad I can not write much this time. Sorry.
It is great to see that you have updated. I think I will have to watch more closely at your story. Your story is really good. Keep up the great work k? I can't wait for the next chapter. I'm sorry that this wont be a long review but I really really really need to go to sleep I have not sleeped that much this week.
On Mon. & Tues. I only got six hours of sleep. On Wed. seven hours and on Thurs. 8 hours of sleep. Man am I tiered! I hate Spanish. I don't like my teacher. She doesn't even help us that much with it either. It is a really pain in the butt when she doesn't help us when we are learing something new or something. Man, I don't really want the school year to end. I know it sounds crazy and all but I really don't.
I like my math class to much to have it end all ready. :_: I like my teacher a lot. He is really cool. Man, I hope I get him next year! _ I really do hope so.
That was a great chapter keep it up! And keep those thoughts/chapters coming! The story is great. You have done a great job iwth the story! I hope more people review your story. _ This is truely a great story. Well, I got to jam. Bye!
P.S. I am afraid that I am going to fall a sleep at the key bourd. -
| mashnut chapter 17 . 5/31/2003
I hope we don't have to wait 3 years to get our hands on the next chapter! Can't wait for the new book eather! I ordered mine in January! :)
| Kathasaurus chapter 17 . 5/29/2003
o0o0o ok bcus i was quite confused about that, thanks for clearing it up, i liked the chapter but it bit off GoF just a little too much for my taste, can't wait for the next chapter though!
| witch lisa chapter 1 . 5/29/2003
I'd been saving your story until it was farther along, because I like to try to read stories completed...but I couldn't wait.
I have only read the first two paragraphs of your story and I'm hooked. I had to scroll down and tell you that you have a talent for very quickly drawing in the reader. It's a skill a lot of folks don't have and that others work very hard to acquire.
Now, back to reading...
| Selania chapter 16 . 5/22/2003
Very good, please update soon.
| snapesophelia chapter 16 . 5/21/2003
hey hey! haven't been on in a while, i missed reading this! i'm very interested in ron's reaction in the last chapter- i must say, i expected him to put up more of a fight. oh well. darn it, i'm only the 99th reviewer! is there some sort of consolation prize, such as...umm...complete temporary ownership of the snape possy? all snape, all the time? i guess you'll get back to me on that one. good work, as always, i'm looking forward to some more sevvie goodness in the near future.
| DragonFireAngelVWP chapter 16 . 5/20/2003
Sorry. I would have reviewed yesterday but I didn't have the chance. My sister was on the computer doing homework. I really wanted to get on and review your story. I couldn't do it after I finished reading the chapter because I had to go get ready for school.
NEwho! That was a great chapter. I think I would have to say the part that is the best is when Sev is really mad and when he saved Herm'. That was a really cute chapter. The part with Ron was so funny. I couldn't really stop laughing.
That's cool that you are English. Is it fun living over there? I have always wondered what it is like in England...Yea that's true cause of the time difference. I can see why you don't want to get it at midnight. Mom would be so mad if I had something come to my house at midnight. Heck, I wouldn't be be able to leave the house for the next two weeks for that. Even if they were bringing the book. Lol.
That's a good thing that you don't have to get up early any more. I still have too. Great to here that you are doing work and trying to get into your first choice University. Good luck! I hope you get into it. Ok. Thanks. I haven't had time to check it out. I have water polo again.
Swim season is over! YES! No more morning practice! YEA! Sleepyo...Z. But I am doing Spring Water Polo. Sadly I am still the 2 metter O and D. Well, not really sadly but I just don't really want to do it right now. Are pool is down so we are doing dry land. It was not to bad yesterday. It was really kinda fun. I like the running part. I don't want to do push ups.
He makes us do too many of those...::GGRR!:: Oh, well. He want's us to win leage really bad when it comes our season. I wonder what he is going to make me do. Oh, well wont find out till the pool is back up.
That was a great chapter. Keep up the great chapter. Keep those chapters rolin! You really are a great writer. _ Well, I got to jam. Bye!
| Kathasaurus chapter 16 . 5/19/2003
oh i loved it! you did rush through the end of the chapter a little but it was still very good. english, eh? i have the ultimate stupid american question for you: if what we call fries, you call chips, what do you call what we call chips? (the wisps of potato and tortilla) just curious