|Reviews for The Slayers|
| Yavanna80 chapter 11 . 1/18/2011
This is not a bad review. Not at all. I hope this can help you to improve your writing skills. I mean no offense.
Please, double check your spelling. There are word that are not correct and it's quite difficult to understand. For example, "be hide" is "behind".
Use connectors. It gives fluency to your text.
"Buffy decide to skip the Bronze that night. Buffy had been shopping all day and now decided to take a walk. Buffy spotted a small park and she walked over to it. Buffy sat down on the swing. Buffy was thinking about how her and Faith use to swing back and forth all day when they were little."
You could use "then", "she decided", "after that"... If not, it's just a little abrupt.
Just double check in order to give cohesion to your text.
As I said before, I mean no offense or disrespect by saying that. Just some iseful pieces of advice.
Keep up with the work!
| obsessed668 chapter 21 . 10/5/2007
ok look. no offense, i completely loved the story! but .. this last chapter. ... its SEQUEL not SQUEAL!
sorry that was annoying me.
but i loved the story, realy good!
| auditoryeden chapter 3 . 7/11/2007
Maybe for Faith, Leah, 'cause, y'know, Leah, Lehane. Kendra, a bit more tricky.
| deletedprofile2 chapter 20 . 8/28/2005
Fantastic story, great twist!
| deletedprofile2 chapter 19 . 8/28/2005
Oh my god wow, go Cordy!
| deletedprofile2 chapter 18 . 8/28/2005
Wow, great chapter, good song choice, grammar was a bit iffy, I can deal _
| deletedprofile2 chapter 17 . 8/28/2005
Shock horror cliffhanger eek! Stupid Angel, poor Buffy, Vani wants bangellyness _
| deletedprofile2 chapter 16 . 8/28/2005
Hehehe, good chapter, Riley is a wanker, congrats for portraying him like that _
| deletedprofile2 chapter 15 . 8/28/2005
Oh wow, spooky, bangellyness pur-lease
| deletedprofile2 chapter 14 . 8/28/2005
Ek, Riley is just a stupid cardboard man, I hate him!
| deletedprofile2 chapter 13 . 8/28/2005
Giles is dead :(
| deletedprofile2 chapter 12 . 8/28/2005
Great work, longish chapter, omg cliffhanger!
| deletedprofile2 chapter 11 . 8/28/2005
Lovely, longer chapter _
| deletedprofile2 chapter 10 . 8/28/2005
Nice work _ Me wants bangellyness
| deletedprofile2 chapter 9 . 8/28/2005
What's happened to Faith?