Reviews for Mending the Knots
Ronel Templo chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
Make it soon cause I know RWBY and NPR are still sore from that death stalker and nevermore and not to mention class. Oh also the professor's didn't show up so there's that. Make a Two day timeskip to get to these characters I know it'll work
Sixsamchaos chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
Actually, some of the larger massage parlors have small restaurants. Jaune could do something similar when he has a small amount of customers or bond with particular ones like Goodwitch and the Beacon students. I do like the ending of this chapter, as it gives Roman a higher chance of living.
Sixsamchaos chapter 1 . 12/27/2017
I rather like these types of stories, as they are usually used as minor or major themes of Beacon shenanigans, and the other stories involve Jaune being some sort of food provider or smith. Hope to see more.
Discard205 chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
I say we should have another Harem
Guest chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
I like where this is going and I hope for pyyrha as the pairing but I'm sure it will be fine no matter what
Lloyd RPGFan chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
This was a pretty good chapter. I always liked stories where we see Roman and Neo's softer side.
superfanman217 chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
it was worth the wait

i love it to beath
ZenithTempest chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
I'll point out the issues that come up for all stories like this, of which there are a few. First off, you'll need to decide quickly whether you want this story to more or less be what this chapter was: some sexual tension with cameo appearances by RWBY characters opining on ongoing plot, or do you want this to be a deeper narrative. Considering the back and forth with Neo and Roman at the end and Ozpin's vague reason for purposefully denying Jaune, you could go that route, but you'd need someone to teach him to fight. Both of these story routes have serious issues. The former tends to get stale in a hurry and comes off more like an omake for a more serious story than its own while the latter runs into plot walls as there's not really a rationale for key RWBY characters to constantly appear at Jaune's shop, making any development with him in the larger RWBY plot seem forced. Ultimately, if you just want this to be a slice-of-life comedy, I'd advise against putting in anymore side conversations where Jaune being 'special' or possibly getting special training, you're only going to get readers hopes up for nothing, which could turn them off more than just coming out and saying it's not a deep narrative.
Rakkis3059 chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
That was fun. I really liked the flirty twins and how all the lower elements of Vale seem to be interested in helping Jaune.
Rasengalia chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
Excellent chapter. Can’t wait to see the twins embarrass Jaune again. And Neo finally getting the massage she wants.
GrimmKingOfAtlas chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
That was. Entertaining.
But I swear if Yang starts making puns I'm killing myself.
Call Sign Slinki chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
Great chapter. For the pairing, maybe have the malachite twins be with jaune. There aren't very many of those so and it would be fun to see.
TheUnHolySmirk chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
god, I love this story...
HeheeeB chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
i love the fact jaune doesnt know who they rly are. also is this gonna be a smutty type of story or is there gonna be a plot and some twists here? but anyways good chapter
psp reader chapter 2 . 12/27/2017
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