Reviews for Mistakes and Second Chances
pconner307 chapter 55 . 9/5
you made this end like a movie and i can't tell whether to be mad at you, or to be sad. but i thank you for making this story for many to read, from till the end of where we go.
Arumia chapter 11 . 9/1
Ahhh, and I don’t think I’ll be able to read any farther, not if the rape continues, for some reason I expected “mentions of rape” rather then “rape” and well I almost threw up and seeing as it hasn’t been resolved it’s probably going to happen again
Solstice07 chapter 41 . 8/17
Too many things don't make sense. Iirc Octavius vanished all the bones in the graveyard in like the first year? And the whole triwizard tournament thing, before that helene was all set on trying to keep her abilities under check, but then proceeds to go all out in a public tournament of all things? Where her losing the tasks would not hinder her plans in any way? And the second task, I can see the organisers not giving a shit about champions' lives, but the hostages? No one would be that dumb, when 3 of the hostages were purebloods. You also wrote yourself in a corner with helene and fleur's teleportation trick, all of their situations can be solved by throwing up a smoke screen and getting tf out of there (the second task for example), you give them these cool abilities and they completely forget about it in the main confrontation? I think two teleporting opponents would be quite difficult to deal with, and you've stated multiple times how fast helene's shadow walk is. Then the whole main confrontation, firstly the ritual doesn't make any sense with the bones being absent, you could've come up with ans entirely new resurrection technique. Also why in the hell are the two of them facing voldy alone, I mean you've got albus fucking dumbledore as your literal slave, and he would even willingly fight with them against riddle. And what's up with dumbledore, he undergoes the whole development arc in this year, but still wont tell helene about the horcruxes? When she's repeatedly told him her plans of killing tom? I'll be honest I love the helene fleur relationship, but the wholesomeness cannot justify how weak and full of holes your main plot is. I mean helene could've used any of the dangerous creatures from the tournament against voldy, by trapping them or something, since you went through that whole subplot which has no relevance than providing story with some action.
Solstice07 chapter 41 . 8/17
Okay I'm a little confused. In the initial parts of the story I remember lord greengrass saying that he vanished all the bones from riddle's graveyard? And the whole triwizard tournament thing, the whole time helene is trying to hide her abilities before that, just to go all out in a public tournament of all things? And don't even start on the second task, I can accept the administration treating champions' lives like trash, but including hostages? That's just ridiculous, considering 3 of the hostages were purebloods. All of this for some action in the story? You also did kinda write yourself into a corner with helene and Fleur's transportation trick. All of their situations can be resolved by throwing up a smoke shield and just getting tf out of there. AND Dumbledore? you've got an op master wizard waiting on your orders and you go to deal with voldy just yourselves? I mean I can maybe justify helene not bringing sirius and lord greengrass to keep them safe, but dumbledore? Also what's up with dumbledore, he already acknowledged helene is trying to do good, knows her plan of taking down tom at the last task, still he wouldn't tell her about the horcruxes? The rest of the story flows smoothly and I love helene and fleur's relationship, just there are some pretty big plot holes in your story.
Solstice07 chapter 11 . 8/15
Still think you should edit out the assault, it serves no purpose and turns away many of your readers. No one wants to read an assault, on the fmc of all people, only for it to have minimal change on the story.
Sankarea396 chapter 55 . 7/24
NO I AM VERRYY MUCH IN LOVE WITH THIS STORY YOU CANNOT END IT LIKE THIS! I WANT AN EPILOGUE OF WHAT HAPPENED TO THE WIZARDING WORLD AND THEIR REACTIONS TO THEIR DEATHS! Also didn't death promise Helene that she would literally not die unless it's of old age? going as far as saying she would literally not die of a heart attack?
Sankarea396 chapter 1 . 7/24
Damn I really should read the notes at the ends of the chapters the first time I read this. I would've known what I was getting into
Sankarea396 chapter 1 . 7/24
I'm giving this another chance cause I couldn't stomach what happened after the assault of Lockhart I can literally readdd anythingg gore torture rape and all that shit but the rape of a main character or someone close happening not a flashback but right in front of my screen is a no! no! So now Im mentally preparing myself for it and gonna have to go through with it FOR MY GHORL FLEUR ISABELLE DELACOUR IS THE LOVE INTREST! AND HARRY IS A GIRL IN THIS! WE LOVE THE GXG!
jaqmaq77 chapter 55 . 7/21
It was interesting... I read it twice... I even (Just for fun, and my own curiosity,) downloaded and transcribed a few chapters... Left Harry as male... and it was no different, it flowed just the same... so I kind of don't get the point of female Harry? A comment at the foot of one chapter more or less said it would diverge more from canon? and I roared with laughter... I don't think I've ever read a story further from canon... but I really loved it, and I'm glad you gave it an end.
The battle's were well done, and quite exciting... even the kissy/cuddle bits were done... yep, I'd buy that for a dollar.
CM chapter 10 . 6/26
Oh my god, "an abundance of homo-shit", too funny. Thank you for setting the record straight, lol.
w0if chapter 54 . 6/28
To be fair i kind of saw that coming since the "are you british"

I guess good job turning the end into something a lot more unique and epic than the first half of the story
Guest chapter 33 . 5/20
I like how you wrote the Greengrass - daddo. It's rare to find fathers in literature these days that aren't portrayed as either evil or incapable in some way
Arceus37 chapter 1 . 5/22
just stayed up all night reading this and i dont regret anything
Kujukala chapter 55 . 5/15
it's so psychopathic and you need therapy...
i love it!
i scarcely see such detailed gore and mental problems in a fanfiction.
i nearly vomited myself a few times xD.
very graphic and very very good are the only things i can say when i look at that fiction.
Good Job!
Kujukala chapter 10 . 5/12
i mean better a gay Helene than a gay harry tbh. i hate gay shit (only stories not people) but lesbian shit is quite nice. (idc if you're either. you do you). who doesn't like two hot woman indulging in debauchery? xD
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