Reviews for I Had A Nightmare- One-shot- Pokémon- Amourshipping
Storm Pegasus chapter 1 . 12/29/2019
good story but a little cringe and unrealistic as ash is dense as hell and Serena is not so confident. keep up the good work though. i hope this qualifies as constructive criticism and not all out criticism
Loz Abi chapter 1 . 1/3/2018
James delete your other chapter thingy, its not worth it you will only get more hassle, you've deleted the stories so you don't need to say anymore it will only get you in to trouble
Guest chapter 1 . 1/1/2018
Beautiful amourshipping, apart from one or two minor spelling mistakes (I'm being picky here) and also I've noticed some of your words in previous stories are spelt the American way, I'm not sure if that is intentional though. You must be a reader as it shows in your stories. I will agree with the previous reviewer,you should re-write the lemons as the stories were really good, the interpretation of the activities shall we say detracted from the story. My only concern is that if your lemons leaked out you would have the embarrassment of everyone knowing you've done them, I'm hoping that as they've been deleted no one will identify them with you as you would most certainly be ridiculed for them (not trying to worry you though) I'm just thinking ahead as unfortunately some things have a habit of not being able to be undone and can can come to bite you on the bum big time, I hope you've got no enemies or upset anyone! .
Guest chapter 1 . 1/1/2018
Brilliant but can I ask why have you deleted half of your stories? I've watched your your tube channel , admittedly not all of it, just your most popular vids and you come across as a cool guy, it's obvious you've got plenty of female friends as they appear in your vids, ignore the haters, they've not watched your vids have they, keep writing the lemons or maybe make it more romantic, use the words breasts instead of tits, that just sounds vulgar. You just need to rephrase it, sex shouldn't be spoken of in a crude way, make it sound like you are in love with the person not just someone to shag, you just need to write it more romantically then I don't think anyone will criticise, you want to aspire to other writers both male and female and to be fair most females will take offence to tits and pussy. For example "ash loved Serena so much and wanted nothing more than to feel her skin on his skin and make love to her as he'd thought of so many times, to touch her creamy white breasts gently. Does that sound better? There are plenty of words in the English language that mean what you are saying it is how it is read by others that you want to be proud of. You want to show off your talent and not have people think you've got a one track mind, which sadly that's what it came across as. There's nothing wrong with taking your ideas from porn (well there is) it's how you interpret it. Keep up the excellent work . I think you should re-write one of your lemons but re-word is as I have mentioned above, that is my challenge to you
Guest chapter 1 . 1/1/2018
Excellent my man keep up the good work, although I don't think you need your friends to comment on your stories, Guest me again is presumably a friend of yours her comments are cringeing (fit) and she can't spell but if it's good for your moral. You have had a lot of comments saying your stories are too much sex related and a lot of stick, fxxk em, only you know you and where your ideas come from, (fantasy porn dirty mags girls).for what it's worth I don't think you've tried it on with a girl, I don't think you would know what to do, well not properly anyway...
Guest chapter 1 . 12/31/2017
(smiles) i gotta say, this amourshipping fanfic is very spicy and sweet dude ;) i hope we all get to see serena and ash get married together in the future as husband and wife in the pokemon series and beyond. we all will remain amourshippers and we all will continue to support amourshipping for all time. as a fellow amourshipper i have this to say to you and to all my fellow amourshippers around the globe who support amourshipping, amourshipper and proud, remember that dudes and dudettes and keep up the good serenaandashshipping work dude.
Guest chapter 1 . 12/30/2017
Good stuff do more like this. A bit unusual (this is not criticism by the way) for a 12 year old boy to write about romance mind. This style of writing suits you much better given your young age. I hope you find your own Serena to love, she will be a very lucky girl to have a romantic novelist for a boyfriend
Amourshipper35 chapter 1 . 12/30/2017
Cute one shot about ash and serana being a couple not not telling Bonnie and clemont very romantic
Guest me again chapter 1 . 12/30/2017
Hi it's ok, I don't think it is her. I've been reading your other stories ignore the haters their jealous of you, I think you are lovley they don't know what their talking about x
Guest me again chapter 1 . 12/30/2017
OMFG I've just been looking at your vids, you are so clever, Im not a stalker just a big
Pokemon fan. I love all the Heartgold stuff. This is a bit odd but is the girl in one if your vids called Lauren cos she looks like my friend I used to go Brownies with, does she live in Rhyl? If it is not her then it is her twin. Do you have her number? x
Guest chapter 1 . 12/30/2017
Bloody brilliant, you are a fantastic writer, I feel like I'm in the story with you. You are pretty fit as well, been watching your you tube channel x
UltimateCCC chapter 1 . 12/30/2017
The next morning Bonnie told everybody.
Ol' 3lue Eyes chapter 1 . 12/29/2017
So sweet! Nice to see people still support Amourshipping!