Reviews for The Wreck
thmstrbtr96 chapter 7 . 12/5/2022
i find this story comedic and funny
naotw chapter 7 . 10/24/2022
"Ablative hulls..." all hulls.

"not irradiated..." about 3-10 lead plates a few cm thick, interspersed with neutron absorbers are enough against CMBR.

"critical to forging a starship" critical to its operation due to mass manipulation, not construction. Otherwise how did humans and Turians become spacefaring without having eezo deposits on their homeworlds?

"no size constraints" the 1km constraint is economic, not a physical constant. The nexus(MEA) is a mobile space station, the arks are 1.5km long each, chronos station is mobile. Size is an economic indicator. Eezo can be used in ships much larger; Ascension.

"likely uses helium-3" not compatible, It's one or either. Also unlikely to randomly think that when the console itself says; "Deuterium Fusion Drive"

"the heat alone..." eezo is not used for heat management. ME fusion reactors are actual fusion reactors.

"our vessels can't..." then how do they achieve constant power?

"any form of containment..." again, how do they run their power and propulsion systems then?

"micro star for any period of..." for fusion power to be viable, it has to be sustainable, meaning containment has to be a long term consideration.

"galaxy spanning" no way to tell from murals, no territory sizes were even shown. War was along the orion arm, and mostly in 1/1000 of it(UEG space).

"equal or more ships than the Asari" UNSC standing fleet in 2525 was 2000, that it replaced severally due to losses. SA has several(3-5) thousand. Turians alone have 50-70k with Asari following. Covenant had 20-50k.

"heavily respected them" unless murals depicted them fighting bravely, no way to determine.

"deuterium and helium-three" UNSC reactors are D-D only, with some antimatter as a catalyst.

"micro star" why repeat it? All fusion needs star-like conditions.

"all without Eezo" eezo isn't a ship reactor component. It's separate from power systems.

"run out of fuel" after thousands of years adrift? Impossible.

ME info. needs refreshing. Good story.
naotw chapter 6 . 10/24/2022
"pocket dreadnought" likely just a cruiser.

"meters of" if referring to armor, it's 0.6m thick. The Normandy has comparable armor thickness (layered 20cm or so thick plates), not new.

"structural integrity increasing design" IRL, that ship would fly itself to pieces due to its shape.

good flow
naotw chapter 5 . 10/24/2022
"predate her people's" how did she determine its age from casual observation? How old is the dawn, at thousands of years chief would likely be dead.

"Hot wiring..." different electrical infrastructures and specs(amount of power, activation method, connection compatibility and others) make any form of technology interaction likely to end in failure.

"taken from them" they largely invaded systems already claimed and strip mined them to hell before bugging out.

"excuse the council..." never really cared abt the fleet. If it did, they'd be chased from council space.

"...to enslavement" quarians that left the fleet commonly attained hierarchy citizenship and lived normal lives. The Volus never formally or openly complained about their status.

"...very expensive" unlikely, notable Citadel economies and scales are much larger than UNSC/UEG.

"directly into the circuitry" that may very likely fry the thing as she doesn't know what amount of sustainable power it needs and whether she can read and decrypt anything to begin with.

"sell ships" when it itself is struggling against piracy due to lack of enough ships and is constantly increasing its navy size?

"human encoding and language" unlikely that the SA would leave such systems in those ships, as they were knowingly selling them to accomplished engineers.

"was ludicrous" unlikely. ME and Halo are comparable in this.
naotw chapter 4 . 10/24/2022
"thousand feet" unlikely to use human measurement system.

" powerful enough for that" for what?

" small dreadnought length" the dawn is a charon, 490m long. Smallest ME cruiser is abt 500m long.

" twice a dreadnought's mass" the dawn is 0.65 million tons. ME codex puts dreadnoughts at "millions of tons".

" not lacking in resources" the dawn is not a proper indicator at all, given present logic flaws.

" difficult to mass manufacture" unlikely given presence and use of ME fields and how silaris armor was made.

" heat resistant technologies" in ME, heat management commonly uses carbon allotropes (clips), plasma vents, lithium sinks and radiators(ships), and various forms of ceramics (weapons fire).

Good send off for cortana.
naotw chapter 3 . 10/24/2022
Good flow
naotw chapter 2 . 10/24/2022
"into using element Zero-based" reapers only used relays for travel convenience as they can turn them off. All other technology is not reaper influenced in such a manner.

"Titanium A" likely doesn't have the same alloy name in both verses.

" expensive" unlikely given economy and industry sizes in ME. More likely to be mass considerations instead.
naotw chapter 1 . 10/23/2022
Good intro.
taintedahab chapter 7 . 8/12/2022
This fix is starting out pretty well and seemed to be going somewhere, too bad it seems to have died in its crib.
Monstrr chapter 7 . 8/2/2022
Please come back to this
spartan117 fullmetalalchemist chapter 7 . 7/13/2022
Vamos
Actualiza tus hisocias por favor
Cooldude101011 chapter 5 . 6/13/2022
I’m pretty sure depleted uranium isn’t magnetic (MAC guns use magnetism as they are coilguns right?).
SHADOWMANZZ chapter 7 . 6/1/2022
great story keep it going
CMDR Kovacs chapter 7 . 5/3/2022
I...I need more... MOAAAAR
Believer218 chapter 7 . 4/14/2022
Time to wait for Tali to accidentally wake up the Chief
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