Saludos:
No deseaba avanzar más capítulos sin agradecer el impecable trabajo que ha logrado con esta historia. Al inicio no tenía idea de qué esperar, en apariencia era una repetición de la línea argumental del libro, unos episodios después descubrí lo que estaba haciendo y me sorprendió gratamente. ¡Es una forma muy novedosa de ampliar y dar nuevo rumbo a los eventos! Es una gran lectura y lo aprecio mucho.
Gracias por compartir.

Here's a thought Harry, get the sword out of the sorting hat BEFORE going to Gringotts! Harry had one job, destroy the horcruxes and he barely accomplished that.

Harry in this story is one gigantic downer, the first happy day in months and the wanker finds something to mope about. Suck it up Harry, suck it up!

The drama in this story is just ridiculous.

Where does Doge get off making demands of Harry in his own house. Harry should tell the old bastard to piss off and if he doesn't like he can can find somewhere else to stay.

Is Harry ever not on the back foot?

Harry doesn't have to explain anything to Moody, Grimmauld Place is his property. Everyone inside that house is squatting there. I always hated how secondary characters seem to feel they are entitled to know Harry's private business.

Is it really necessary to plug in responses Harry wants to give in between actual dialogue during every conversation Harry has? I like to feel like I'm inside the character's heads most of the time but the Harry in this story agonizes over everything and it gets tedious after a while. Also, Harry and Viktor are both gigantic bimmers in this first scene.

Harry really has a problem keeping his shit together. Seriously, can he not receive any information of a sensitive nature without it being followed by extremely long paragraphs of his internal turmoil afterward? I get it; the news is upsetting, but suck it up and move on!

The battle scenes were not realistic, particularly towards the beginning before Harry met up with McG and Co. There was way too much bantering between Harry and the death eaters and not enough Harry cutting their fucking heads off with sectumsempra for my liking. Harry had the drop on Bellatrix LeStrange and he forgoes taking advantage of that to talk with her... that is just stupid. Then he watches Alecto kill Susan Bones and disables said Carrow seconds later, then he just leaves to chase after Malfoy and doesn't off the bitch before he goes. Don't even get me started on Malfoy, hesitating to punch his ticket after all the ponce has caused just makes no sense whatsoever. Also, it wouldn't hurt to write action scenes in common English; not everything has to be a descriptive metaphor; it takes something away from the experience when everything is described in such excruciating detail in the middle of a fast-paced fight scene.

The chapter would have also been much better if you had left all the Harry/Fleur angst out at the end. I honestly don't give a fig about the romance angle anyway so the last part of the chapter felt like an unnecessary detour from the final clue Dumbledore left Harry.

I never like McClaggen much but that was a pretty decent thing for Harry to do.

Its not perfect and there was something about the writing style that had me spacing out a lot, but this story is so excellent from a narrators perspective. So many things Ive always wanted to see in a fic happened here and they were executed so well. Great work, definitely recommend.

Enjoyed this a lot! The first act particularly, that was excellent.

I couldn't even wait for the chapter to finish, this is fantastic! The way you write these interactions are deeply satisfying, ahh back to it

So far this has been a very interesting read. I enjoy the pace you set, taking time to let things happen and explaining them but not getting bogged down in too much detail. The dynamic between Harry and his friends is refreshing as well. I'm enjoying it a lot