Reviews for A Beautiful Lie |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Great story, love how you intertwined the major aspects of the story into your version. Thanks for sharing! |
![]() ![]() I feel like Voldemort just had a Homelander moment. Suddenly seeing soldier boy back.. |
![]() ![]() ![]() what is happening with the tone here? the situation is so serious but the tone keeps shifting from a dire last stand to a happy reunion, to meeting your greatest enemy, to laughing at an enemy strung in the air. I don't know which to feel and as soon as I get into the mood the tone shifts again. this hasn't really been a problem until now, and what's with everybody just making up over the last few chapters? I feel like it would have worked better if they only came to an agreement or decided to put differences aside and sort things out after the war. in my opinion keeping the tone consistent and tensions high throughout this chapter would have made it much better |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is an incredible chapter. I always enjoyed watching the interactions between the two. This is exactly how it should have been in the sixth book of the canon. Frankly, I believe in your Dumbledore more than in the original. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You should have aadded what happened to Daphne, and to the rest, as well as where Grindelwald was buried. What became of Aberforth? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Why the hell did you destroy the stone? It is idiotic, to destroy one part of the triad. This story had a good start, but, it has turned into an angst-ridden cesspool. |
![]() ![]() Great story but deems like a few plot points were dropped, what happened to Daphne? She leaves then just never shows up again despite a few hints that she will. And what happened to draco and Astoria. Why do we not find out what happened to the vast majority of characters |
![]() ![]() ![]() A brilliant piece of writing. Harry's a bit too angsty at times but I really liked your portrayal of him and his flaws. Dumbledore and Grindelwald were brilliant. I quite liked your Fleur as well. Although, drama bw H/F was a bit frustrating at times. I absolutely loved the ending. This story was worth my time. Thanks! |
![]() ![]() Ugh. Flour’s back. Great… |
![]() ![]() Excellent chapter, though I hate Fleur even more now. I just can’t imagine her and Harry together. The idea just kind of sickens me in this fic. Definitely gonna be skipping any romance scenes later if they end up happening. |
![]() ![]() I really hate Fleur in this story. She is being painted as correct, but really, she’s just a vane, disloyal predator who just makes things messier than they need to be. The writing is pretty good and it’s very teenage angst in a way that makes sense, it’s just painful to read. I’ll probably just skip the scenes with Fleur if her and Harry really do get together. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Not entirely sure why you felt the need to keep the foolishness with Draco getting the drop on Harry in here. It doesn't really add anything other than Harry learning Tonks is at Hogwarts, which could've been done later. This scene, and the weird sleep potion Harry took (which apparently was needed to sober him or eliminate a possible hangover?), which I assume was to help explain why your slightly more intelligent Harry would still be dumb enough to end up in that situation, didn't really tell us or Harry anything useful. It's not like Draco said anything meaningful. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It is insane how well you are able to write such a dramatically angsty character assassination of Harry but still make it compelling and true to his canon character. Don't get me wrong, this is very well written, but poor guy can't catch a single break. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ah, sounds like daphne ended up in a marriage contract…. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I guess I was completely right when I said this story follows a chinese xianxia soap opera, at the critical juncture it is revealed one of the love interests has been hostaged, and so the full martial might of the mc cant be put to use until Harry cuts his balls off or left foot in return for Fleur. |