Reviews for A More Realistic Hope |
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![]() ![]() ![]() How are you going to save Junko? She's more of an ideology than she's a character. And I do mean that literally, keep in mind that I do love Junko, but she's not really a character, but more of a plot device, like she doesn't come across as an actual person. The problem with trying to save or redeem Junko -other than what I already stated- we were never given vivid detail or the specific events of Junko's childhood that gave her her love for Despair. Sure, Junko claims it's to fight boredom as Despair is the only thing she can't predict, but I feel if that were actually true, not only would she be Yandere for Makato, as she can't predict him, but the fact she can predict happiness or sadness and yet she can't predict despair? It's not that Despair is unpredictable to her, it's some mental illness she sufferers from that allows Despair to be the only thing she can feel, and it comes across as pleasure rather than suffering. Another problem is, we have no clear idea of what Junko's mental illness is. So, my point is, with alot of the stuff I pointed out being unclear, how would Makato be able to help Junko? |
![]() ![]() ![]() well thanks, this was pretty sweet :) |
![]() ![]() This is good and interesting story |
![]() ![]() Well, Naegi is actually average in nearly everything but misfortune and good fortune and intellect... and motivation to do the right thing. And hope. |
![]() ![]() ![]() cool |
![]() ![]() Dude the parts with Makoto and Monaca were the best parts, he was like a father to her. If he asked the Ultimate Yakuza, then I’m sure the dude could actually pull some strings and make it so he actually was. It would be nice to see more of other people’s reactions to how Makoto and Monaca interact with one another as well as how those people effect the two. Like Souda, Miu, and K1-B0 build a little prototype kind of endoskeleton that takes all three of them to control (nothing is perfect). One person per leg while the remain individual monitors her spine and makes adjustments to prevent any further injury. They barrow and surprise Monaca with it before they go on to surprise Makoto, who is likely looking around frantically for her because one moment things are okay and the next moment he’s laying on his back trying to remember how to breathe after being sent out a window (he limps away with a cracked rib and dislocated shoulder, he’s luck that it isn’t anything worse). I’m rambling, but if you’re interested in hearing more ideas then email maybe? |
![]() ![]() ![]() i know its late, but i really hope jt would be a non despair fic, since Monaca and Naegi's interaction is too wholesome |
![]() ![]() ![]() a pity i quite enjoyed this story well its good to know will at least continue writing |
![]() ![]() ![]() if you ever need help understanding the tags on Ao3 let me know! I'll be happy to give you pointers :) I'm super excited for the rewrite! |
![]() ![]() ![]() please. make that Junko and Makoto AU! |
![]() ![]() Ok, first, I want to tell that I really love to read all your stories again. You have a lot of talent. Second, I don't know if you have a tumblr or deviantart or something, but I hope you're okay though the current situation. (Sorry, I don't speak English very well, so maybe there's something wrong) |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's awesome please update |
![]() ![]() ![]() The story become a little monotone after a while, not to say the story is bad, but for me is repetitive and almost the same in chapters... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow. Byakuya's sister. What's the reason she's a cyborg in this world? |
![]() ![]() Thanks for the update, and happy new year! |