Reviews for The Last King
williamkillian98 chapter 33 . 9/12
Maybe a new chapter? I mean I do know how difficult it is, but you can give us a new chapter.
williamkillian98 chapter 33 . 9/12
How about an actual update?
Falcon6 chapter 12 . 9/10
I very much enjoy this fiction and only have a few criticisms. Number 1 is word usage. If you don't know for sure what a word means, check before using it. You use "bemuse" when you meant "amuse." Amused means humorous and bemused means bewildered. This is not for this chapter, but for the story. Number 2, you have Tytan using his sword and shield with him as a right-handed person and always describe him as reaching for his sword with his right hand. Nothing wrong there. However, you have him wearing his sword on his right hip and dagger on his left and that should be reversed. You describe Tytan's sword as 4 feet of Steel and you can't draw a sword of that length from the same side it's worn on. Long swords are drawn across the body. I figured you were thinking of Percy's time as a Roman and Roman soldiers wore their swords on their right and drew with their right, but those swords were Gladii and they were short swords. The longer Spatha used by the cavalry was not worn the same way for the same reason Tytan could never draw his weapon, his arm is not long enough. Just food for thought. Great job otherwise.
Liamtheharrypotterfan chapter 33 . 9/7
This is fantastic well done!
Blasian Malaysian chapter 33 . 8/27
Food for thoughtEverytime you end a chapter you say what do you think lol. I imagine you as my mom breast-feeding good stories your boobs are delicious thank you mama
Blasian Malaysian chapter 25 . 8/26
I hate that you approved RLJ. Can you explain why? The tv show is not canon.
Checkingdude chapter 23 . 8/22
Ha! Called it!
Checkingdude chapter 21 . 8/22
Okay, I’m calling it now, Ivar didn’t turn traitor to Percy. He clearly knows more than he’s letting on about Percy’s powers, combat prowess, and political maneuvering. He didn’t talk about any of the real facts, I’m all but positive he knows about the “coup”. This smells like a set up where Percy is lining up his problem children in bite sized amounts so he can knock them down easily and with little effort on his end. Honestly the biggest threat is the one from Essos that he hasn’t quite accounted for yet, but he knows to be wary and is taking steps to curb it.
blyat chapter 1 . 8/22
this fanfic is good, the grammar is somewhat good also but the only thing that irks me is why use percy if your just gonna make him out of character? why not just use an oc? why not just create your own main character?
WOLF-GOST chapter 33 . 8/17
update soon
Durkasmurf chapter 1 . 8/16
Tytan?... that's a little off yeah? I mean, it's nice that it's not a recycled name but honestly that might be better than what she did here lol. just my opinion.
UltraMickey chapter 33 . 8/13
This is a very well written story, and I’m surprised there is a crossover. I’m glad I saw this and started reading. Please continue to write this story, as I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Red Riding Cape chapter 33 . 8/11
I love this story, thanks for all your hard work!
Guest chapter 33 . 7/29
My guy

You should really read up on ghengis khan and his descendants and how he made his empire so he won’t be constantly putting out fires lol

My guy just needs to shit ton of kids to fill in the slots lol

The great houses would even thank him for marrying into their lines to get their magic lol

He just needs to discretely kill them off so his family would be the only one standing

Do this at the tail end of winning the wars to come tho

Too bad ambrosia ain’t a thing

Maybe Percy could eat souls or faith energy to top himself up?
Guest chapter 33 . 7/29
Hope you at least got a happy ending out of this so we could continue kingdom building with Perseus as their God Emperor

Sire more bastards to act as Astartes lite since they would be demigods too

Percy, Leaf and Myrcella just gotta shower then with love like a family should in their early days with guided lessons so they are as prepared as can be h
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