This story is AMAZING! Thank you so much for writing it!1 There were a few grammar and spelling mistakes here and there but still it was so fucking good!

Damn fuck Sakura first she says Naruto should've died and now she says she has feelings for him? what a bitch

Love the story but the guitar parts made me wince. Also the TV lmao

Naruto:NANI?!

Ino:im so sorry naru-

Naruto: begon THOT

ayyy nice nod to Lonestar with including Amazed

Eh is it still a ninja naruto fanfic etc or just a one without ninja ._. Because I don’t see why kno the *ninja* would move away to get away from some random guy with no ninja training

I thoroughly enjoyed this story about my Naruto OTP.

The only real issue I have about it are real world things you implemented into the story. Like the movies and t.v shows, a plane seriously. Without those these elements in your story it would’ve like it was actually part of the naruto universe.

Other than those minor things; I truly enjoyed this read.

lol, is this a drama show? Wish you would kept Shikamaru more in character, but its whatever.

Ino is one of the most attractive women in the village by far, and it is surprising that she hasn’t hooked up yet.

This is the best i loved it do another one plz

Its pretty nice,I like how Naruto is over Sakura

well... this has just messed up the time line to the point where Naruto marries Ino instead of Hinata, that is sad mostly, but pretty good, well i have Naruto marrying Hinata, they do have good relationship with each other, best part that they're funny, and sometimes stupid too.

good! I love it.

Naruto dropped the soap...

I dont know where to start , this piece was such a mixed bag for me on one hand I appreciated the early piece on naruto having this emotional baggage from being a jinchuuriki that affected him well into young adulthood and it made me go yeah absolutely I can see that making sense . But then on the hand , we have this immediate tone shift where naruto murders sasuke and needlessly expresses that ino is far too good for him and it comes across as only being said to move the plot forward and doesnt work organically . I think that sentence sums up how I feel about this 40 chapter piece . There is nothing wrong with taking a character and shifting their ideology heavily from the authors intended vision for the character , see broken beyond repair and ino slipping through several stages of borderline personality disorder , the issue I come across is that nothing builds this premise that in this reality naruto has gone from a cheerful merciful and just character to a murderous obsessive asshole . There was nothing in naruto's character shift that made sense to me thematically , he seems almost cruel in his punishment of others . That's only speaking on the Male lead , ino is not quite in line with the stories premise either , she has her touching moments where theres a genuine understanding for her affection towards naruto and it makes some semblance of sense , but right as you start to think that maybe just maybe shes adapting with the writer as they become more comfortable with their story , she watches naruto beat the shit out of a few guys outside her apartment and makes no mental note that hey that's not healthy . There is no moment in the story where ino challenges naruto's moral code , she remains supportive of indifferent to naruto's actions . The supporting cast is dull with the exception of kiba , Sakura is a one note vague character that never goes anywhere or does anything , as a reader I anticipated her to be the acting conflict in the series once it became clear she had rethought her feelings about naruto , more on that later . Shikamaru just isnt Shikamaru , he is so far from his original character that I am convinced the only reason hes placed as the launching point for an explanation to ino's availability is because who else would she be with ? There is no care put into his actions and it seems he was written so lazily because his untimely demise was thought of well ahead of time , so there was no point making him a compelling antagonist or foul because he wasnt as important to the plot as he should have been . One of the positive things I can say about this piece is that kiba is excellent , I ended up caring more about him then naruto and ino near the end . His separation from hinata served excellently to cement him as relatable and imperfect and I wish he did more . The supporting cast is effectively obligatory background noise to make the world feel attached to the naruto universe . Hinata and kiba splitting should have worked as a case study for naruto and ino to think about what can go wrong in their relationship if they mistreat one another , and it truly felt like it was going that direction right up until the moment that nothing came of it and it just served to place kiba where naruto was at the beginning of the story , a drunk dullard who's character arc is solved immediately and doesnt feel organic . I wanted to take a closer look at the unfortunate case of Sakura as well , she is far too one dimensional to be useful and honestly shouldnt have been spotlighted like she was up until the halfway point . She makes no real attempt to intercept the relationship and is non existant to progression she simply ceases to be and it was a missed point that subverted expectations in the wrong way . Now then off of characters and on to plot , the first 10 chapters are the most solid part of the story , there is at least some attention to the characters written and it works fine , not good not bad it's fine . But you start to realize around chapter 15 that the story has no real direction and the writer keeps setting up interesting plot points and immediately abandons them . The story is constantly shifting between a conflict driven romance drama to a slice of life romance and it destroyed pacing , with 4 or 5 chapters passing with nothing interesting happening in the story except for sex and movies that shouldnt even exist , underhanded jab and a low blow as a critic but I find myself more frustrated the longer my book about your book gets . Theres no attempt to evolve the relationship in a meaningful way and it leaves the characters at 18 feeling no different then the characters at 20 and 30 and so on and so forth . As the story progresses we come to the thankfully few fights in the series where I forced myself to read for the sake of being thorough not being entertained . No thought was put into the fights and not much more needs to be said even with just sage mode any version of naruto after the pain invasion arc is on the level of the kage and hokage naruto especially would have absolutely zero trouble with ohnoki (the third tsuchikage) , the fight is poorly written with zero creativity taken into consideration when writing out a fight . The lack of tension in the story and lack of characters being pushed forward sucks the soul of the story and unfortunately I cannot recommend this to anyone except as a case study of terrible writing , there were glimmers of good ideas that were ultimately squashed by the writers fear of the reception of the story they were telling . This story couldnt figure out what it wanted to be and therefore didnt not represent the positive sides of any of the subgenres it attempts to adopt , it fails as a slice of life because the life being lead feels like buffer points to the next plot thread , it fails as a dramatic romance because their is no opposition to the protagonists and no progression in character growth save for kiba cleaning himself up over night because of an off hand comment naruto made to him while kiba was hammered in public . I wouldnt even call this good lemon writing it's the same tired sex scene shoehorned in to keep the teenage boys reading and I end up skipping the lemon chapters , a good lemon chapter incorporates the characters dynamic in the story at that point and the tone changes as the characters change so the intimate scenes fall short as well for being copy and paste material . I wanted this story to be good and I went in with high Hope that it would at the least entertain . But it failed to do that in my own opinion , on a scale of 1 to 10 1 being so terrible I genuinely never want to read again and ten being i genuinely dont think I'll find anything that will top this i give this story a 2 . I hope you grow as a writer and let yourself fall into your writing and your stories , pick a lane and stay with it until the end . Take time and think about the characters and what would people really do in the situations you've put them in .