|Reviews for A Completely Indecent Proposal|
| Kvan chapter 1 . 1/2
Looking forward to reading more
| nif-ravenpuff chapter 27 . 11/30/2020
I absolutely love getting carried away by a good story and forgetting that they’re just words on a screen. You deliver so flawlessly!
| Artisticmom2 chapter 27 . 11/12/2020
What a great story! I thought it interesting that you not only alluded to, but dealt with, the PTSD that all involved must have felt after the war. A great job all the way around!
| Lauren-jade Thomas chapter 5 . 9/22/2020
I got quite a giggle out of the password being auchentoshan ️
| Jazmin Li chapter 27 . 7/1/2020
Hola ! Me encanto esta historia!
Creo que el principio fue medio raro, jajja pero por lo que vale sirvio.
Estuvo bueno que mostraras lo que le sucede a la gente despues de una guerra. Sin dudas, algo que a veces no se ve bien reflejados en los fics.
Incluir a los centauros y la ceremonia de aprendizaje sin duda fue genial, algo distinto a lo que siempre leemos.
Muchas gracias! voy a ir a leer tus otras historias. Saludos desde Argentina. Pude leerte en español gracias al traductor de google ;P
| jada951 chapter 23 . 3/11/2020
Dumles, eh.? I thoight it might be.
He and molly make some pair!
| Guest chapter 27 . 9/30/2019
Thank you so much!
| fly-flap chapter 27 . 9/12/2019
All things considered I like your story.
Somehow the last chapters weren't as good written as the beginning. But nevertheless, it was quite good.
| K1P1 chapter 27 . 7/21/2019
| Jen chapter 27 . 7/11/2019
Oh I loved this story, thank you for writing it.
| amsev chapter 26 . 5/9/2019
Love this story! Thank you for writing.
| Mrs.NicaLeeSnape chapter 27 . 3/22/2019
This was a good story!
| DragonIris chapter 27 . 3/18/2019
I have mixed feelings about this fic. The story itself is excellent as is your writing, but it doesn’t have the feel of a HP fic. It isn’t necessary because it’s extremely AU. I’ve read er stories of this type, and if there isn’t a name for this trope, there should be: There are some stories that read as if the author have an idea for a fantasy or sci fi story and plug in characters a popular, well known story. It could be Edward/Bella, Hermione/Severus or Lucius orDraco or Harry, Leia/Han Solo, etc. This accounts for it not feeling necessarily like the HP multivere. The second issue is the vast majority of the characters are OOC. Again, not because it’s AU. I’ve read other fics where the characters had to deal with the aftermath of the war andessentially extreme PTSD, and yet the characters and the feel of the story were definitively HP. There are many different characterizations of Severus that even have their own look and while different, are easily identified as Severus. This character was missing Severus’ edge, except at the very beginning. The same with the Hermione character. I couldn’t even picture her. Thee were two characters that I had a real problem with. The first was Harry. I don’t care how seere his PTSD, he wouldnt become a serial rapist. Even after he got help, it still had no resemblance to Harry Potter, even at his worst. The second was the character that SS/HG fanfic authors love to vilify only slightly less than Ron Weasley: Albus Dumbledore. I guess it’s because Severus didnt survive the war or maybe it’s because of how sharply he spoke to him when Snape asked him to save Lily, but for whatever reason, Dumbledore is characterized as only a smidge less evil than Voldy. What makes it particularly egregious in this story is the fact that it wasn’t really necessary to the plot. You could have easily written him as “manipulative” only when necessary, but your portrayal had him going out of his way to be manipulative and cruel for no good reason. What was the point? SS/HG fanfic wtiters need to remember that not everyone that ships Snamione automatically hates Albus. He was just like Snape — he made mistakes in his past that he was trying to atone for. Why is it you can grant Severus compassion but not Albus? It can’t be because Severus’ reason for contrition was Lily Potter because most of you write her as a heartless b**ch, which is another unfair characterization based upon the incorrect view that she dropped Severus as a friend because she refused to forgive him for calling her a name. She made it clear why she couldn’t continue their friendship with the final thing she said to him. He was on a path that maintained all Muggleborns were inferior and she was a Muggleborn. To remain friends with him made as much sense as a Jew staying friends with a Nazi. Even if he was willing to make an exception for her, she would have to accept the fact he hated Muggles at the very least. As for Albus, you all really shouldn’t for her remember that JKR wrote him as one of her heroes. It’s a slap in her face to try to make his vilification practically canon.
| Kelkat chapter 27 . 3/16/2019
| skyeryder01 chapter 27 . 2/10/2019
Really loved this story and everything about it!