Reviews for To His Coy Mistress
Queen of Koorime chapter 1 . 9/22/2003
This was a very good story, I really enjoyed it. Also, I noticed your mother left you a review, and said that you would be embarassed. Don't worry, my mother does that all the time...

Anyway, great story!
besasama chapter 1 . 5/14/2003
Nicely done, jeslyn! However, I find it amusing that you can spell masoch...masa...introspection all by yourself, but no matter how many times your beta reader kindly rewrites/types the word for you, you can't seem to spell "They", as in "The played the same game every day." P P P

Anyway, though, it's a very nice fic. Poem that an offical type of fic yet? It should be.

-The Besa
your Mother chapter 1 . 3/29/2003
Sometimes I am amased by your many creative talents and your delightful sense of humor. You make me very proud and I can't wait to read the other fics you have written. Now that I have embarrassed you (which by the way is in a mothers job description) I just wanted the world to know how much you astound me
warriorGL chapter 1 . 3/27/2003
Story Scoring

(Scale 0 - 5)

Plot idea: great!

Score: 4

Why: nice humor/romance

Originality: thumbs up

Score: 4

Why: it's been done before . . but with a twist this time!

Plot carried out: good!

Score: 4

Why: like i said, good!

Balanced descriptiveness/basics: great!

Score: 4

Why: obvious

Flow: good, it read very well!


Why: obvious

Genre fulfilled: yes and no

Score: 3

Why: it should be romance/humor

Not much OOC: a little, but that's what made it interesting!

Score: 5

Why: you took good risks while staying in character!

Risk taking: yay! like i said above

Score: 4

Why: see above above

More please?: sure! but it's good as a oneshot too!

Score: 5

Why: see above

Paced: mh . . . a bit rushed, but not too bad!

Score: 4

Why: it seemed to fit, some of it, the rushedness . . .

General comments: cute story over all!
Nandelin chapter 1 . 3/27/2003
Wow, that was really good. I love the ending, it was very appropriate.
AngelicFairy chapter 1 . 3/27/2003
Really good fic! The poem fit so well and I liked the humorous ending. *Maura*
Jay chapter 1 . 3/27/2003
*grins* Not bad. I like. Keep up the good work.

Tashana Ambrosia chapter 1 . 3/27/2003
Wow. I loved, loved that poem that you used it was so cool. Wherever did you you find it? Anyways, I liked the way you wrote this up, it was really interesting. Nice characterazation! So cute. I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for posting it and sharing it with everyone.


-Tashana Ambrosia
kyanos chapter 1 . 3/27/2003
ACK! what a completely appropriate poem for miroku... LOL! nicely done... i personally don't see why he would get slapped for groping after an admission like that AND her kissing back... /shrug/ oh well. i liked this piece. very cute
Airy chapter 1 . 3/26/2003
I wish I could have read your fic, but the format made the story all bunched together. Without a paragraph format, it's impossible for me to read it. :( If you can fix up the format, it will make it much easier for people to read.