rereading this chapter Im definetly seeing parallels between Jaune fighting and Highlander from for honor but maybe thats just due to the nature of both of them using large claymores.

So, why did not Jaune at least try to do the aura stealing thing? It seems like a plot-thread that was either dropped lr a power that was completely forgotten. Kind of like the special abilities of Piccolo in dbz that are just never used aymore.

Rip amber, glad pyr lived

I actaully feel bad for raven- he dont even know vernal arc

This is such a good fic, actaul human emotion and thoughts, depth, im in love

Wow, you certainly have a talent for writing. you have vision, you set things up, and there is payoff. You delve into darker themes without being graphic, focusing on the emotional fallout rather than the details of it. Jaunes weapon made me think this would be an edgy story but it really wasn't. You have some issues with leaving out bridges between chapters, i often felt like that leaps of time were made and not to the benefit of the story. That said, the macro narrative flowed quite well, while the ending was a bummer in many ways, it felt like it was susposed to leave the threads unresolved for us to pick up. Anyway, excellent story, keep up the great work!

idk wtf the other comments are smoking but this is pretty good story, Raven jaune and yang were pretty good team.

my only complaint that you didn’t show Raven apologizing to jaune at the end, and i real do want everyone to give him a hug because the poor man deserves one

Just finished rereading this story. It's just as brilliant as I remembered. Thanks for one hell of a ride- it's truly incredible work, especially that ending.

pretty good start.

So after Raven backed him into a corner with literally no where else to turn, she offers him his freedom and is supposed to look like the good guy? If she had done that in the beginning none of this would have happened. Having Jaune just accept that he's been wrong his whole life over one interaction is such lazy writing. I don't think I've ever dropped a story this far in but I guess there's a first time for everything.

God this whole 'Raven was secretly doing all of this for Jaune's sake' is so thin and poorly written that it's just annoying. She set him up to fail and is acting like she did him some huge favor.

This is so forced. It makes no sense for Jaune to be so wrong about Raven. If she cared about him she wouldn't have put him in this position in the first place and just given him freedom with the option to come back to the tribe if he wanted. This story went from an 8/10 ff to a 5/10 starting when Yang met Raven and you tried to change her whole character with a sob story.

There was literally a chapter where Raven tortured Jaune by setting his lungs on fire, but I guess if that gets mentioned again we'll find out that she was curing his bronchitis or something. So disappointing.

This whole situation is 100% ravens fault for not just letting him go and it's really annoying that you're writing yang to think it isn't. Jaune would have never had to do any of this shit if she didn't dare him to "earn" his freedom instead of just telling him he can do what he wants.

So Jaune is supposed to trust yangs opinion of her mom who she doesn't know other than that she's a mass murderer and abandoned her, but she's doesn't trust his opinion when he's known her his entire life and was raised by her?

This story really dropped in quality around the time yang met raven the first time.

Yang is being written as an idiot. There's no way she would almost call raven "mom" at this point either.