Reviews for A Fish Out of Water (ASOIAF SI) |
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![]() ![]() ![]() You really don't like Stannis it seems. No matter. I'm itching for the battle. The Penrose interaction was hilarious. Who will the Riverlands sear fealty to is the question. If we're entertaining the idea of Northern Independence then Dorne will get ideas as well. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The Arya Edmure conversation was adorable. The fact that they are family understandably didn't register as she has grown up separate her entire life. Incoming fallout due to Robb's decision to throw away his promise to the Freys will be interesting to witness. Nice chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a wonderful SI. I rather like the fact that your SI has encountered the butterfly effect, yet still has yanked success. because let's be real, 100% accurate intelligence is a pipe dream for any commander. Your Edmure is practical, realistic, and importantantly for narrative stability reasons, has won fights that didnt exist in canon. Sure he stumbled initially, but it seems as though he has actual respect for his military skills now, rather than in the early parts where he was banking on rank to get things done. Also, I dont beleive I have read a GOT fanfic that the charecter A. setup regional competition for the maesters |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story straight up made me reconsider SIs. Haven't ever read any for the Asoiaf fandom, but was turned off the concept from other fandoms. Honestly I'm not certain that I'll have a ton to say each chapter as far as reviewing goes. This is just a very good story and you deserve the review counts if nothing else. If i can think of suggestions or corrections I'll do so, or just ramble about some of my own thoughts. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sweet exciting politics! Man Roose is an ass. Can't wait to find out where the Riverlands will go. Renly is out of the picture. If they join Stannis, he won't let the independent North be as such. If he joins Robb Any Northern conflict with the south will cost him dearly due to the geography of Riverlands. The little Darry bending the knee just ticks me off lol. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love the partnership between Tywin and Kevan. Both complete each other. Tywin is brilliant as always. Really loved how you solved the dilemma of supporting Renly over Joffrey by discrediting Stannis and his 'lies' and the looming threat of assassination of Renly if they do succeed. Great chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() "Suddenly, Bronn leaned forward like a hunting dog on the scent" Excellent imagery. Edmure taking control and butting heads with lord Darry was good. The battle depiction was exciting. Marq's failed execution shows Edmure's inexperience especially when the point is highlighted that a thousand men would make a great difference. Awaiting Robb's entry and the chaos it brings to the story. The question of Northern independence will be interesting considering that if Riverlands were to join the new kingdom they would be the buffer space between the rest of westeros and the North and would get trampled first while the north would rest above the neck in relative safety. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Edmure questioning his emotions and feeling uncomfortable is a good part. Robb didn't stick to his deal with the Freys if I remember correctly. Good stuff. Extremely curious about who Edmure will end up with. Your writing is very engaging. Cheers! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love Bronn's character and his chemistry with the protagonist and your dialogue really makes the conversations super interesting to read. Got rid of Vyman ,nice. Also the whole plan with Cat getting ruined really shows Edmure's lack of experience in this world. He'll have to learn since the timeline will be radically altered soon with only tid bits of information, motivations to help him navigate this world. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice chapter. Really looking forward to seeing these characters evolve. Love the chaotic and realistic feel of the story. Maybe you could add some mystical and magical elements to it down the line. |
![]() ![]() ![]() A bunch of spoiled frat boys lol! Rereading the initial chapters is a treat in itself. I hope you plan and execute your story to completion. All the best. |
![]() ![]() Dany one of the 'good' Targaryens? That's a laugh |
![]() ![]() ![]() I remember reading and loving this fic and I'm glad it's still continuing. A well written Tully Perspective with the SI element. I hope you complete this story. |
![]() ![]() I want more |
![]() ![]() A very unique story overall. Thanks for posting. |