Reviews for Lizard Brain
j23d chapter 1 . 4/9/2018
I like this so far! The spelling and grammar are pretty good, and the description, if a bit long winded, paint a picture of the setting very well. Personally I'd prefer if the paragraphs weren't as long, it gets tedious staring at a wall of text, no matter how interesting the subject is. That aside, I can't wait to see the next chapter :)
skye-speedy chapter 1 . 4/9/2018
Looking good so far. When will Kakashi find out he has a daughter and that her mum treat her badly. Is Hikari the same age as the rookie nine or is she younger then them. Plz update soon.
BlackZion chapter 1 . 4/9/2018
it is a good story. Keep it up ... I love it
Cisk Kazzarch chapter 1 . 4/8/2018
So upon the first causual read-through i didn't notice any mistakes at all. Afterwards I skimed it somewhat more carefully and noticed a few minor mistakes.

This is the only thing i noticed something regarding tense.
The womans expression has morphs into a furious scowl.
should be: The womans expression morphs into a furious scowl.
Is this what you had in mind?

And than some typos, though i likely still missed some.
But that -cqn't- be, I have seen Kakashi a few weeks ago
That stupid urge to hide has gotten a -lo4- stronger
got him to jump -knto- bed with you
It -sounda- like she is; should be -sounds-

I realy like this kind of story and it is clear that you spent some thought on this. You writing style is also enjoyable. Deffinitly will keep an eye on this.

May I ask how long it took you to write the chapter?
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