Okay that was eye opening and so epic. Nice job.

Hahaha the best line there for the moment Everyone was stunned. Harry Potter had done something truly amazing. He had kept Ron Weasley from eating.

Loved this story. And I will definitely read the sequel! Great work and thank you, I've thoroughly enjoyed it.

Great story so far.

My first note on this one, which I must say I am enjoying quite a bit. But I do have two issues: 1) I never thought I’d say this, but there is WAY too much sex in this. I get it for PWP’s and stories that are clearly thinly disguised erotica, but this story actually has good characterization and plot, but I end up having to skip 40-50% of each chapter, because after a point the sex is just, well, boring. 2) British pudding is not the same as American pudding. British pudding is basically American cake, but your descriptions of Luna eating pudding make it obvious you aren’t aware of this. I realize you’ve finished this, but if you ever want to sneak in a revision, you might want to change this. It makes Seamus’ reactions to Luna eating odd, as they hinge on Luna eating her pudding with a spoon, which she probably wouldn’t do. Well, she might because she’s Luna, but eating British pudding in the way people do is not typically an innocent-but-erotic experience.

I am really enjoying your story and how Harry and Pansy are developing a relationship. I also like the subtle deviations from canon creating different outcomes. Thank you for sharing your story

can you pls explain why you would banish anyone in a fight? so they can get back up, recover and re-engage? cause that is what has happened every single time

he drove off the dementors sending them off to who knows where and getting rid of the evidence only then does he think of an auror? how stupid can someome be

he learned a summoning charm and cleaning charm wandlessly and silently in one summer 2 years ago and that is his total knowledge of spells. wtf has he been doing for so long? training with moody to do what? nothing?

honestly this story is terrible, interesting idea, some very sharp observations but the plot progression makes no sense at all. that is inbetween the endless dry and meaningless banter, im talking like 90% of the story. it added nothing and was soo tedious to read. your lifting story is amazing but this? i can hardly believe you are the same writer

voldemort paranoid about house elves? is that why kreacher is alive?

where the fuck is harry's training, his super wandless magic. why give him any of that but not use it...

why kill crouch when its harry they want death with the tournament? that is not that hard to figure out

he could use dobby to get literaly anyone but he chooses the big light show for hagrid...

how can sirius get caught with an axe by mcnair in an ambush but in a duel with yaxley only get a sore shoulder...

you are going to forgive dumbledore arent you?