|Reviews for Betrayed|
| Hadeen chapter 14 . 9/19
I enjoy some of this story but two things stand out in this chapter. A marriage is a partnership and this imbalance in theirs makes little sense. When it comes to kids generally it always raises emotions and expectations. That Lath would be sort of ok with his terrible behaviour is odd.
That she is not demanding to know why a 40 year old reclusive stranger is sending letters to her 11 yr old daughter and giving her gifts should be seen as grooming and terrifying behaviour.
Thank you for the story.
| Mando-Vet chapter 26 . 8/25
Not bad, not bad at all. Well done, mate.
| cheshirecatsmile chapter 26 . 8/19
I really liked this, thanks for writing
| lastgodofwar chapter 26 . 8/9
What pissed me off about this is. He knew if he had a kid they could be magical. He knew if he stayed they would get a hogwarts letter and join a broken dead world who needs to be lead by the hand like children. So why not leave go to america or Australia or france. Basically every good person in magical england who does nothing but has a wand is a murderer. Because they have allowed the corrupt to hold power too long without fighting. Just like they did nothing against Voldemort. They deserve to wither and die. I would have just grabbed my kid and been gone.
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/28
This story started strongly but became weaker rapidly. It seemed as if Hermione had passed on her prejudices to her daughter and the rest of the Weasley family were not much better. And the relationship between Harry and his wife was completely unrealistic and I found myself skimming through their arguments as they became monotonous and repetitive.
| Pableroski chapter 26 . 3/11
Quite an interesting story this one was. Not my favorite, not the ones I usually read, but that doesn't mean it's a bad one. Full of angst and resentment. A sad one, but I truly enjoyed it
| EdTheBeast chapter 26 . 2/19
Well! I went back and forth about continuing to read this or put it on hold for a while. I decided to finish reading it. I believe this is a must read. It is not action, but is more along the lines of if good men do nothing, evil will prevail.
| Apoorva Nautiyal chapter 26 . 2/15
Thank you for this beautiful book. And even a bigger thanks for completing it.
| hobbies458 chapter 4 . 1/19
She entered a pub because she was the only one that seemed to notice it?
Yup, that logic checks out.
| Jemma Blackwell chapter 5 . 1/14
Why didn’t he just move to America? Like Hogwarts is the only school.
| Jemma Blackwell chapter 2 . 1/14
Surely Vernon would have seen him at work? Especially after he got a promotion? You really couldn’t think of any other job for him?
| antim1santhrope chapter 26 . 12/21/2022
SPOILERS will be in my review, please don't read if you don't want to be spoiled
I read the entire fanfic in one go. I was throughly immersed into your reality that you created. I really enjoyed the story overall. your original characters for the most part were created well and used well. the plot was a fun idea, the world seemed mostly realistic, I can go on. now I did have one issue, and that's myself personally, I'm sure there are others that loved what you did.
so let's start off, book Harry was very selfless, your Harry is very selfless for the most part. helps out kids with cancer, puts his kids over himself even if he struggles doing so. ...
the big difference is your Harry Potter put himself over the wizarding world when they betrayed himbetrayed him by believing a map they didn't know could be wrong) and your Harry ran away and had no intentions of returning for them doing that. so I don't see why that same harry who's still bitter at the people that wronged him( in your epilogue he still is very distant from everyone but Ron who believed him most). could find out that the ministry and wizarding Britain was responsible for the love of his life dieing and be selfless for the rest of his life towards them
| The8thMarauder chapter 1 . 11/26/2022
You are disgusting, pairing sirius with someone old enough to be his mother. Unless you made her young which is just dumb. Yeah next fic please
| Basil-Duuuval chapter 1 . 11/11/2022
This may be one of the best first chapters I’ve read in a long time. The way you revealed what had been done to Harry and then dropped that hook at the end? Wow. Just wow. I usually wait to comment at the end of a story, but really am completely hooked and thought I’d say so now. (Oh, also, the fire fueling Harry's anger/hate is refreshing. So many times he is written to be to easily forgiving of the various betrayals he suffers, imho. I really enjoyed reading his cold, hard responses to everyone. And the severing himself from the Wizarding world - no matter where you ultimately take it - was a joyful *chef's kiss* for me. Not sure what that says about me, but there you have it). Kudos!
| adelgado04291 chapter 26 . 11/9/2022
Great job. parts were sad , of course, to read but great job.