|Reviews for Betrayed|
| Annoy mouse chapter 26 . 12/9/2013
Very sad story. Whatever did Albus tell Harry about how his wife died? You mentioned both in and out of the story that there was more to it but I seem to have missed it.
Thanks for an interesting story.
| Tam83 chapter 26 . 12/8/2013
hi ! I'm french so sorry for my bad English, i read your story at first in french but the end hasn't publish i decide to try read the end in english. I'm not good in english but i understand your story and i love it :) Your story is beautiful and i love it :) Congruation ! :)
| lambtastic chapter 26 . 12/8/2013
Man... This was great! The only thing unsatisfying was Kathryn's death. What a muggle way to die in the most magical place in England. Death by staircase... Anyway, I'm glad Harry was able to reconcile with his past. I really enjoyed reading this. And I really like the part about the younger generation being hidden from the wizards past mistakes. You know I did hear something about how in Germany they did try to hide what they did from the younger generation as well. It's like that for a lot of places even from the victims side they try to hide it like in Japan and how the younger generation there don't know about the A bomb attack. That was a great addition and it brought such a different perspective!
| Silvers45 chapter 1 . 12/6/2013
Not a bad start. Wondering where this will go...
| CharmedArtist chapter 26 . 11/17/2013
Oh, this was excellent. Truly...
| xyz chapter 11 . 11/13/2013
um this is not exactly a review. (I am on chp 11)
I am German and visited the museum during my year in a student exchange program when I was 17. It has a deep impact. You get a kind of passport at the beginning and you can follow the life of this person as you follow the times in the museum. And in the end you will see if the person survived or not. They also have ppl telling their stories on records. I will never forget it.
When I told my friends in Germany about it, their reaction was kind of like 'why should they have this museum it has nothing to do with them' (remember 17 ; there also was a change from the "everything American is cool" of my youth to "Americans are arrogantly trying to police the world and ignoring their own faults") My opinion was and is, that that horror should never be forgotten though there are many others in every country's history. (Colonization was a pretty dark history with genocide)
I thank you for portraying the generation conflict in Germany after the war the way you did and I really liked that you compare the wizarding world's behaviour to it. The way you did that in the story flows really well I think
I would like to assure you that WW2 is a very serious topic that is also taught in school. In history of course but also through reading books like Anne Franks Diary in German class. We even saw a film in class on what the Allied forces found in the concentration camps. (I got sick)
(my grandfathers fought in the war but they never talked about any of it only that the war itself was horrible (they still cried about their memories at ), as if there was nothing before the war, and the terrible post war times. I think my generation ( I am over 30) does not feel guilty as a nation anymore as my parents' generation did but we will never forget.
I hope you do not mind hearing that from me.
I do like your story and thank you for sharing it.
| toothless20 chapter 23 . 11/11/2013
What about the resurrection stone, can't he use that too bring her back.
| HarryIsAnIdiot chapter 5 . 11/11/2013
u know i want to kill him right now
| ShadeMidnight chapter 26 . 11/6/2013
Amazing, truly amazing...words cannot describe
well..maybe they can, but still good story!
Shade E. Midnight
| LilithRyoka chapter 26 . 11/2/2013
I'll sadly admit that, when I first started reading this story, I didn't -not in my wildest musings- think it would be any good. I had prepared myself for weeks that this would be a mediocre story, riddled with clichés simply because of one-one!- past experience with a beginning *similar* to this one. By that, I mean the whole 'Harry Goes To Azkaban' thing. I allowed myself to be prejudiced against this story simply because of one experience. I honestly thought this would be crap.
Dear heavens, was I wrong.
First of all, the writing is excellent. There are *very* few mistakes and typos throughout these 102 thousand words, and most of them seemed to be results of bad edits. Well-written stories with few distractions in the form of typos and such are always a very good plus to me.
The sentences are very well-structured, and they flow easily through the story-so easily, in fact, that it barely took me more than 3 hours to read it all. It was that good.
Secondly, I like your characterization.
The consequences of Harry's quite-long, unjust imprisonment in what most people can call Hell On Earth are very easy to be believed. The way that his seemingly-eternal suffering has scars so deeply rooted in his persona that more than a decade later he still didn't quite know the extent of the damage, the way his friends-and to a higher extent, the entirety of the Wizarding World- tried to bury the memories of Harry away after a while, how they started to ignore the things that so truly happened in their past, ignore who they were and how they viewed the world simply because it was a means to lessen their pain, to lessen the deep *hurt* of their Betrayal, was...fantastic.
Also, Dobby. That scene was very warming, when Dobby confesses to Harry that he had always believed in the boy-now man's honesty. Much the same thing with Ron. I confess, it was a breath of fresh air having Ron being the Redeeming one. Often, most stories I've been reading have been bashing him in one way or another, so it is quite refreshing to read something a "a bit" different.
I thought Kathryn's death to be a bit *too* convenient for the evolution of the plot, but it was still the catalyst to a plethora of very emotional scenes, and, eventually, the better-changing of the Wizarding World. I'm not saying Harry wouldn't have eventually gone the same path, or a similar one, had his wife remained alive...but i would've taken longer, probably, and he wouldn't be as effective.
Some of the things I disliked, though, is that while the story itself was excellent, it felt a bit rushed. One of the greatest examples of this is Amelia Dursley. I've no doubts that she could grow to be a wonderfully intricate and lovable character, but there was not enough time for her to flourish. In fact, I can't honestly say *who* she is...because there weren't these sorts of breakthroughs for her. Some glimpses, here and there, of who she is as a person, but not enough to truly satisfy.
Also, whatever happened to Hedwig?
Also also, poor Hagrid. Always gets the short-end of the Killing Stick. (not really).
Excellent writing, superb story and characterization, albeit a bit rushed...This was a very good read, and I commend you for this work.
Cutting this review short, since I terribly need to sleep,
| The Froob chapter 26 . 10/31/2013
I have to say its been a long time sense iv found a story this well written.
10/10 this was a fantastic read i hope you keep making awesome fanfiction like this!
| WeirdCornChip chapter 18 . 10/25/2013
This chapter made me cry. Beutiful story
| Noble Korhedron chapter 25 . 10/24/2013
Hmph! Well, I'm not surprised he's cutting them out - I would too! In fact, I'd probably've just told the PM to bomb the Ministry and have done...
| Noble Korhedron chapter 24 . 10/24/2013
"Total silence met this proclamation." Yeah, I'll bet it did... COWARDS!
| Noble Korhedron chapter 23 . 10/24/2013
Oh. Man. They REALLY have NO. IDEA, do they?! *EVIL GRIN*