So desperately want this story to continue. Hope you are well!

Une suite ! :3

Bonne continuation :)

Your writing style and detail is wonderful, I am really enjoying and intrigued by this story you have developed. It has been a few years since any updates, but I hope you are well and come back to this eventually! Stay safe!

I've been wondering for months now where this story is going.. I really hope you are well after these crazy last years and that one day you return to continue this amazing story. I'll be waiting anxiosly for your next update.
Stay safe.

Dear DesertC, I am very much wondering what happened to you.. It has been so long since you have updated this, or any other story for that matter. I sincerely hope you are well. I'm still checking regularly for any sign of you here and in the mean time enjoying rereading your magnificent stories. Thank you for sharing all of this and my best wishes for you!

Jakie to jest dooooobre! O kurczę, czekam na kontunuacje!

Youre my favourite writer, I truly hope (selfishly perhaps) that you continue writing x

Looking forward to this story

OMG. I about died at the Monty Python reference :)

But seriously, this was a pleasant first chapter to read. I enjoyed your initial description of Lucius Malfoy immensely, as well as the dialogue and general interplay between him and the other Death Eaters. I look forward to reading more.

Thank you for sharing!

Please continue!

I'm not sure I'm entirely convinced by the whole "aroused in spite of herself" trope (which is to say, I am entirely unconvinced, I'm sorry to say. Only angle where that might conceivably work is Stockholm Syndrome and I think it's a bit early in the day for that). I should have thought it would have been more natural if she were shocked, appalled and disgusted by his voyeurism and touches. But you piqued my interest again with the scene with Voldemort at the end. The rest is more than fine, as I say, so I hope you'll read my constructive criticism in the spirit in which it is intended. Ta very much again.

Ooooh! Voldemort's dangerous conversation is very good. I almost wish you hadn't revealed what Snape was thinking so early so it was still ambiguous whether or not he is on Hermione's side. But it is very well done. Slow burner but nice and sinister. Top class!

Aha, I think we can all agree with what is going on, although it was perhaps hinted at last chapter. A nice little cliffhanger to turn an otherwise cosy chapter on its head! A plot development which has perhaps been seen before elsewhere, but a nice new approach to it. A what a nice little mess Hermione has gotten herself into, to use the Victorian sense of the word! Very lovely little touches, the pipe, the Wind in the Willows. Such vivid descriptions of the ingredients and storeroom.

I reviewed this as I went, pausing between reading, as I wanted to add all the comments as they occurred to me, rather than risk forgetting at the very end. This is very good. I like it very much. Very, very much indeed. Your characterisation is en-point, Snape's quiet authority, Lucius's whistling and twiddling his cane, and distain for all things muggle. It really is a real treat to be able to read something so well-written since, there is, frankly, a lot of dross floating about on this site. And getting upper middle class British English, or England/ Home Counties English, or whatever these wizards constitute, right, their swearing and turns of phrase, is such a rare find and it all fits together so beautifully (p***ssed off, ar*e and not a*s, I include the stars in case the filters block my comment). And I like that you've not shied away from the se*ual stuff and swearing but neither have you rammed it down our thoats: it's nice and nuanced and fits completely with the plot development, rather than getting in the way and gratuitous. And your characters are not narrow and one-dimensional but complex: Lucius is chipper one minute and insecure the next, clutching his cane (the poor dear: isn't his life so hard), then back to the authoritative. One question, though: what does Lucius mean by she will wish she had been on the right side? Surely they wouldn't accept a mudblood defecting to them, the Death Eaters? Or do you envisage them all as massive hypocrites (as in my writing!)? Also, it occurs to me that the bone throne could have been a cliché but your Voldemort isn't a pantomime villain and it fits his chilling portrayal. And Lucius's petty insult at the end fits down to a tee.
Thank you so much, this really is delightful :)

Hello! Very curious to see the end. I really hope that Snape could be more terrify. This is the first history using this point of view.