I find it weird that people can tell if someone is a shadow clone or not. not even the bykugan was able to tell and somehow everyone that has seen it enough or has a dojutsu can tell except sakura.

Great chapter thank you for your wonderful work

Great chapter thank you for your wonderful work

I smell copyright infringement.

Good

You should have left Sasuke as not caring about sex.

Great story with plenty of sex and more sex.
I like that Naruto went from dead last to King of a large harem of beautiful women.
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The only problem I can see with the story is too much talking. It can’t be called dialogue because it feels like chatting and it takes away from the action that’s supposed to happen. Instead of describing the fight in detail you do this: talkone sentence describing one move someone didtalksentence about how they reacted to attack. Instead it should be way more detailed so we can visualize the fights. Same thing with the lemons. Just a ton of talking and not enough detail. Other than that it’s pretty good for a smut story. Then again this was such a long time ago idk if you’ve improved on your writing since then.

if no one will influence you then ur fic is a piss of shit useless trash mot be deleted

I am sorry I have always found leaving the teams the same to be lazy work. Others have done this and have given good reasons You don't seem to cover things very well in this either. You just expect us to take things on faith the way you wrote it so far.

well...that was worthless, having it seem like sakura was actually joining but not really? wtf was that shit? you might as well not had her there at all, sasgay is not straight, get over it

Awesome story hope part 2 just as or better

Gods, but I wanted to be able to get through this story. But, between repetitive dialog and frequent contradictions (not to mention how often you screwed up something as simple as gender pronouns) I can no longer continue to struggle through this farce.

To be perfectly honest, my breaking point is during the 4some in ch 21. You're writing a smutfic, yet seem to have absolutely no idea how sex works at all. A dick doesn't magically grow 4 fucking inches just because an extra woman is in the bed. And fer chrissakes 'Let's focus, he hasn't cum,' to "girls, I'm cumming." With absolutely zero explanation. This doesn't happen outside of dime-store hentai. Add in the fact that the plot of To Love Ru makes more sense than anything I've read so far, and I can not, in good conscience, recommend this story to anyone.

You have real problem with forgetting what you have written. Its every chapter you tell the same story of he has Kyūbi or who the dad is or even about the invasion. The other character has been told these facts multiple times and each time you say they are shocked to hear it. Not only that you just say shock and acceptance in same sentence. The biggest fault of this story is the fact that ino was the first girl and she supposedly learned to actually train yet is possibly the weakest out of any character

Std are real