this story was fairly good but I'm a bit disappointed as you allowed Hiruzen to live and retire as Hokage but then you have him just completely disappear once Tsunade becomes Hokage. You could've had Naruto occasionally training with him or made him a new Advisor to Tsunade or even have him helping her counter Danzo's bullshit

I really hate when people are soared about the marker being copied as it makes absolutely zero sense. I'm sure that during the war Minato didn't take the time to pick up all of his hiraishin kunai after each battle and that Iwa probably studied it quite a bit same as most likely Iwa. Also I have no doubt if it was so easy as just copying the symbols then Jiraiya and Danzo would've copied it and Danzo would've probably used it and taught his mindless drones as it would make it easier to get them in an out of multiple nations

I'm quite shocked that Danzo didn't have his two proxies object to sending Tayuya on a mission to Sound since she was framed for the release of those 3 morons

Jiraiya always was pretty much worthless since under Pedomaru and Tsunade his teammates made huge improvements while Naruto came back from his "training trip" barely any better than he left and the only thing to truly show for it was his knowledge of Jiraiya's books since he was made to edit them for him. Kishimoto gave Naruto the shaft so much I mean really he comes up with the Akatsuki who work in pairs and at least in the two who are after Naruto they can neutralize Kurama's chakra and yet he writes Jiraiya's focus as being to train Naruto in using MORE of that chakra instead of actually making him into a real ninja that's just messed up lol

Guys it a whole story of lemons if you came for kick ass fights then your in the wrong place only true men of culture read this because lemons is were it's at right now

why is he playing peacekeepers, he earned his chunk status. kinda is just a weak child

Bro their(which means your) reasoning is totally flawed. How can he be charming when he is the dead last!

3. With the start of the Wave Arc I'm just gonna make one thing clear. Haku is a girl and the ONLY character that will be have an alternate gender from the story.

Damn, no fem-Onoki, damn

I actually liked the team 7 lemon

No matter how hard I try, I can never get past this chapter.
I'm greedy, and I hate this chapter.

You dear mention the great The Lemonsage in what I can only call a bland water downed attempt at a seduction technique Naruto concept

You're seriously over using the word "nervously" in many cases it's not really the best word choice cautiously, tensley or guardedly show use the mood.
Plot wise its not bad just needs some polish.

wtf fuck are you making Naruto shooting duds so damn stupid. wont be reading this shit. idiotic

the fighting scenes were shit

and would have been better if it wasent so fast paced