|Reviews for Deku: The Telekinetic Hero|
| Chris schiltz chapter 29 . 8/30
I thought your story was good, I liked the change ups and different courses it went. I hope you are still writing more and enjoying it. I hope you and your wife have a happy life together, they only make us stronger.
| Archangel Change24 chapter 6 . 8/30
You know…. I honestly don’t know how to feel about this chapter. On 1 hand Midoriya IS better than Bakugo, not with his quirk but with his humanity. On the other hand i can see how some would think Midoriya is looking down on Bakugo. Meanwhile this fanfiction still has the problems that i have with the original series save for one. The one you fixed was Mineta being in UA. Sure he is general studies now but the the guy’s behavior is that of a sexual predator. Next is the fact Bakugo is never punished for how he acts. Bakugo acts like a rabid murderer and also tries to KILL Izuku in the battle training. Never mind the whole “it won’t hit him if he dodges” or “it won’t kill him if it isn’t a direct hit” bullshit. bakugo uses a LETHAL attack on a fellow student. And instead of being punished in any visible manner he gets “Consoled” instead. How messed up is that?!
| Blue-Happens chapter 20 . 7/14
I could be wrong, but I could have sworn toga's accidental flashing thing was earlier in the timeline, if he's so good at his quirk in like a few weeks, it doesn't make sense that the incident happened his third year festival
seems pretty clear that the incident happened the year before, or the year before that
| Blue-Happens chapter 6 . 7/14
I like this story, and you're a good writer, but I'm f*#king tired of people victim blaming midoria in his relationship with bakugo.
even the canon is very problematic in how they cover it, and s#*t like this gives the message that if you get bullied it's your fault, and you need to apologize
bakugo beats the hell out of midoria, is verbally abusive, and nigh incapable of any outward empathy or respect
he literally tells midoria to kill himself from the start!
he is objectively bad! stop trying to normalize his behavior, he seriously needs some therapy and anger management, it's not normal or healthy for anybody around him, let alone himself
| wish-i-was-alice-16 chapter 6 . 5/25
Me reading the end of the chapter: "Thanks, I hate it."
Really seems like you still wanted to have a bullied Izuku to justify his heart of gold and determination to be a hero like in cannon but realised it wouldn't make sense with him having a quirk that is miles better from the rest of his peers, barring bakugou maybe, so you wrote that.(I mean seriously, how is the guy with the elongated fingers bullying him but not the other kid in class who could extend his eyeballs?)
I'm not that mad at Izuku realising appearing meek on purpose out of some sense of duty is stupid but wether he was actually that powerless or not, what Bakugou did is abuse. And it's not even the fact that Izuku doesn't realise that but it's that you portray that as healthy behaviour.
'Well Izuku is strong and now that everything is clear and he apologized, Izuku and Bakugou's relationship can evolve into a rivalry and it's all good.'
I mean, F that, really. You want to make a good rivalry between Izuku and Bakugou? Have him realise that what he did wasn't cool wether someone has power or not but instead of villifying him and having him give up, let him use his determination to push him forward and become a hero that will fight those injustice and create the rivalry because becoming a hero and rising to the top has become much more important for Bakugou.
| Guest chapter 1 . 5/10
Ok, but why would he think that his quirk is weak? Telekinesis is extremely overpowered in general. Just look at tornado and what she’s able to do. It’s not all about lifting things. Think outside the box, make a shockwave or crush the insides of a human. Just train the amount of force you can apply through your power and you’ve got an extremely versatile quirk.
| Jetstream chapter 8 . 1/28
"I'm kinda sorry, but much of this chapter is still almost straight from the manga."
You do realize that when something is identical to the original source material, you can skip it, right?
Like, just briefly summarize how annoying the press is and then get to your material?
Don't transcribe canon. A few lines for context is fine, entire scenes is not.
| Guest chapter 2 . 12/9/2022
Even weak telekinesis quirks are strong because you can destroy peoples joints, disorient them by moving the fluid in their ears, push at their eyes probably blinding them, or even grab something internally such as their brain and just off them like that.
| DeltaWolf2038 chapter 20 . 11/1/2022
heh, meibe but probably not
| DeltaWolf2038 chapter 15 . 10/31/2022
1: deku has a secondary quirk. hammerspace. only ever uses it for his notebooks and pens
2: damn this monoma is dumb, i remember a fic i read, that had him take endeavors quirk for a fight against shoto... well i think it was shoto
3: ok, that "what is he gonna do? come and say he needs it back" was funny
4: good fight, izuku didn't break himself for once
| DeltaWolf2038 chapter 5 . 10/31/2022
i've always hated how tenya says it, "you realized there was more to the exam!" it almost degrades the effort izuku put into saving ochako. he almost makes it sound as if izuku only did it for the points he would get from doing so.
| Guest chapter 29 . 9/23/2022
You took to long getting to the point of activating ofa and how it boosted his telekinesis quirk
| Guest chapter 10 . 9/23/2022
Izuku doesn’t need uraraka for her quirk you said in the begging that he could lift up his moms car but the average car weighs 4,000 pounds which is more then enough to lift himself and others without going over his weight limit and can also lift more things along
| Guest chapter 3 . 9/23/2022
What kind of telekinesis does izuku have does it allow him to only pick up organic matter or inorganic or both? And if so could he fly with it? Did his limit also go up?
| Demostrathe chapter 1 . 9/20/2022
Quingping city sounded so racist it had me dyiing