How sweet...I think you handled this very well. Nice job with the aftermath. And the dialog? Lovely, sincere, romantic (from an observers pov) and fun at times.

Hehehe...Nice...I knew to expect it, and somehow you still caught me off guard, I'm not really sure how. I like the running theme of adrenaline though, it tied it all together well. The quick development was a tad depressing and left me feeling a tad deprived, but it fit with the chapter. I didn't really feel like you could pull of a detailed love scene here, and in context I think you did the best you could. And I'm a hentai, yes I know. So sue me. And I'll keep reading.

Let's see...I'm not all that fabulously experienced with writing battle sequences either, but I've read more than I can count. Here's my advice: split up the events more, one move making up one paragraph. It gives a fullness to each move/new development within the fight that is lost when they are placed more closely together-they tend to run together that way. Simple syntax usually helps as well-it gets the mood of a battle across better, to have shorter and less complex sentences; it gives a better impression, is a better imitation of what it really is to be in the middle of one of those battles experiencing it or observing at close range; in such a situation, one can't stop and think too long, it all comes in a confused jumble, and even when you are on top of things, it doesn't mean that you have the time for complicated grammar. Just my opinion, 'tis all.

A long one at that. So much for me demonstrating such concise, simple, short sentences separated from one another.

Nice set up for the story anyway.

Love it! Keep up the good work! ~

hmm...this is a very good story...please update soon...or if you're not going to finish it...then at least pleaseput like an epilouge or something to end it

I can't wait to read more of your book. I printed it off for a friend to read and dhe keeps bugging me to find the rest of it. Please put it on!

I love your story. My friend printed it off of the computer and lets me read it once in a while. I can't wait to read more of it.

i like this story and the characters but do u think maybe u could finish it?

I don't know I liked this chapter.

I've wanted to have a sene were Sota interupts kag and inu for A wile thanks for it.

This is a pretty good story so far. i just had to stop for a minute to tell you that before it clicked that you were talking about the game Othello, I thought you were talking about the Shakepeare play (since previously, Inuyasha had been studying textbooks), so I was a little worried about how they could play Othello and which scene was happening... Then my craxy mind started working and I remembered the game...

Keep up the good work. Sorry I misunderstood you...

this is a great story and i hope u update soon!

Wow, great story. I think having Inuyasha and Kagome figure out their relationship while their is still danger gives the story a unique twist. It's nice to see the fatherly side of Inuyasha but I'm glad he hasn't changed too much. Well it has been a year but I will continue waiting until you update.

wot! go kagome! psh. i wouldnt care about what ppl sed if i was having a child that people disapproved of the father! cuz i dont! oh...huh. i do know how that feels...lol

So lucky to find this fanfic! Wow... I am certainly waiting for more! It's nearly a year since you updated... Hm... Please update, okay? A lot of your readers are loyally waiting for you!