Reviews for The Pinnacle of Evolution |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I'd like to continue reading this, but its just not fun watching the protagonist constantly fail at every opportunity Yes, I get he's a barely trained civvie with rapidly deteriorating information up against people in better positions to leverage their own information, but its not fun when he gets a punch in the face every time he tries to do anything Maybe that changes, maybe it doesn't, I won't be finding out |
![]() ![]() ![]() Possible spoilers for others. The Geth have, quite possibly, hundreds of complete stealth ships, capable of literally ENTERING a planets atmo undetected, let alone in space. So the question is, why do have the Geth not put a fleet of ghost ships around the omega 4 relay? We know that the omega 4 relay is the most commonly used relay outside the one shepads slings an asteroid at during the the reaper and collector invasions. You've altered the future, but affecting the supply lines of Ascension and limiting indoctrination is arguably more important that the actual reaper ships themselves. Its been proven multiple times they are not indestructible, and its only a matter of time before everyone starts building the proper ships, so it only makes sense to remove any way for collectors and other reaper controlled races from manoeuvring around the space and from utilising the relays. Which the reapers still rely on, might I add. Furthermore, do the Geth not know about the alcubierre ftl drive from Andromeda? It seems the Geth know about Andromeda, given they know about some of the characters featured in said game. It would give them an edge in maneuverability and the ability to hold supply lines for core worlds and dreadnought/stealth ship shipyards. The Geth were already in the process of making a Dyson sphere in the games if I remember correctly too. Overall, not to be a Debbie downer or anything, but there seems to be a lot of inconsistencies or overall lack of general thought and planning in this story as to how these avatars existence would actually affect the world. Furthermore, If, assuming the council REALLY don't want to believe the others about reapers, then you could easily reason with the Geth to publicly declare war on the council and start attacking their home worlds and colonies. That way at the very least the council will be FORCED, to start researching new technology and to build bigger ships. Especially if the Geth can create pretty much create a dreadnought in only 1 to 1a half year. Better stealth ships, rendering effective against the reapers, better ftl, relay alternatives, especially if the Geth start guarding and destroying certain important relays, better weaponry against Geth armour, and bigger, MUCH bigger, ships and therefore stronger and bigger equipped weaponry on said ships. Just, you have access to insane possibilities, and not the willingness to use it. You could render the reapers and catalyst literally useless via the Geth alone. Especially now that you've upgraded them beyond their prior limits. |
![]() ![]() ![]() GrimlockThat's what I'm saying, bro!" |
![]() ![]() ![]() I wonder if he'll share that Andromeda has species that have alcubierre ftl drives via eezo |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm confused, Jordan is both synthetic and organic, right? That's how it was explained. Then how has he spent over 2 weeks or something without exploring his newfound mind powers? I mean, he's half AI, or rather he's been turned into a full AI, so he should be really quick to learn things, like... Impossibly quick, no? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Honestly speaking, I really like the Cerberus and Shadow Broker options, it's honestly super rare to see them be chosen. Scratch that, I don't think I've EVER seen a Mass Effect SI chose those two. EVER. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i miss you |
![]() ![]() This story is amazing the only thing is you haven’t posted and now I’m sad. Characters are compelling and plot is based well in the story enough to give it a grounded and mass effect feeling, but open to allow the kind of freedom that inspires good writing. I’d love to see and read more from you especially on this series. Keep it up and please post more I’m dying inside |
![]() ![]() ![]() stopped reading oc is just such a little bitch just make the hole story crap |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great more ocs added to the story, minus 5 points. It added nothing to the story |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like how the Geth thought he could negotiate with Shepard. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This showing. I get dropping in an SI without an incredible skill set, but at least give him an IQ of one hundred. |
![]() ![]() Just found and read this today, great work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() annddddddd this is where I stop, what's the fucking point of adding this oc all he does is get beat up, whine, shit himself in fear and spew out knowledge he shouldnt |
![]() ![]() ![]() Looks like a crackfic, I'll still give this a try but I hope its not |