Reviews for Paper and Sand
ShatterTheIllusion chapter 19 . 2/16
This is super amazing. This is quite literally a one of a kind story. Update please.
Omppusolttu chapter 19 . 11/27/2022
Absolutely fucking amazing, sadly seemingly abandoned
readwritemm chapter 19 . 9/2/2022
This is such a great story! I love the emotions and how people are seeing a different side to the endbringers. I want to see Annette and khepri meet again! I’m looking forward to seeing what happens next, and I hope you can continue this. Thanks so much for writing, and I hope you’re doing well :)
Peanut-Butter-Bandit chapter 19 . 8/16/2022
I love the premise. I kind of wonder if the first three endbringers also defeated Scion or how they attracted Eden's attention. Eden was one thing it felt like was too simple out of all of Worm, after all of the things to get to that point the simple was a relief, but stories like this are neat. The what if?
I love the introduction via Annette, and that you didn't bring Kephri back to Brockton for the stint in the protectorate.
I'm really curious for more of the background scenes with Eden and would love to see how Eidolon is mixed in. Does Kephri know from Golden morning that he's the controller? It seemed like she knew his emotions had to do with her conflict drive.
It's also interesting how you're taking the free will into account with the mastering still making her show up for fights.
I'm really curious about the Golden lights and kephri causing triggers... is she being groomed as a proto-enitity? A replacement for Eden?
Love the story.
Thank you for writing and sharing!
haphazard1 chapter 19 . 5/9/2022
This is an amazing story, but incredibly sad with what has happened to the people who became the endbringers. Lots of very cool ideas and scenes, but the pacing does seem a bit off in places. I hope you decide to continue it at some point.
CMVreud chapter 12 . 4/10/2022
CMVreud chapter 11 . 4/10/2022
Hooooooo~ what a chapter.
Nice to see that 'ESCALATION' is still written with capitals.
CMVreud chapter 9 . 4/10/2022
The last part is rather poetic. And sad.
Guest chapter 19 . 1/24/2022
This is just so... I font even know.

It's like it's equal parts hopeful and heartbreaking. It's definitely a story I hope continues some day.
Ryo Oh Ki7 chapter 19 . 9/27/2021
Love love love
Fenasi Kerim chapter 1 . 6/30/2021
This is one of my favourite fics of all time, hope it gets updated.
imgoingtokms chapter 19 . 5/13/2021
i love this
GreatT'Phon1of4 chapter 19 . 5/8/2021
I don't know if I like the concept or execution of the story more. I like the mutual understanding friendship thing going on with Dragon too. Very nice.
StormMagi chapter 19 . 3/25/2021
Holy fuck I love this so much
derpysauce chapter 19 . 1/16/2021
Sad to see this has not been updated in a while. Story had a lot of good aspects.

The premise as well as the plot have been pretty interesting, and there have been quite a few genuinely cool moments.

As you mentioned in an end note I think the pacing is not the greatest. Khepri felt like they went from barely able to communicate with humans to literally normal in what felt like three scenes. And maybe I was just thick, but I dont understand how other than them regaining their humanity/memories more. Their integration and relations with PRT felt way way too fast as well. Obviously they know people quite well and having a chance to stop an endbringer is very good motivation, but the lack of push back from 3rd parties (cough cauldron) felt very out of place in the ward universe, but unfortunately rather in place for this story.

Obviously this is a fanfic, your fanfic. Do what you want it's yours. My concern however is the lack of conflict in the story. Not actual conflict obviously, but just opposition.

Struggling against her own instincts, fighting against Eden's control, fighting people's image of her. Fighting cauldron's web of lies.

They just aren't there and it confuses me. Instead we have khepri curb stomping the things that hurt her in her past life. Which is cool, but not really interesting I hate to say. Obviously an endbringer can demolish them all.

It feels like you have a really good outline of what you want to happen for the story to progress, but the inbetween is just not there

I hope I'm not coming off maliciously I genuinely think this story is good and hope you continue writing it.
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