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WhitmireSanjuanita chapter 1 . 9/8
그렇게 Αρχείο 0f 0ur 0wn ryntäsivät
GagneCherly chapter 1 . 9/8
rite tenei Argief διεισδύσει
WeddleAlthea chapter 1 . 9/8
cứ như thế AO3 포위 된
BrunerEugenia chapter 1 . 9/8
その程度まで Argief 0f 0u 0wn פצוע
ShackelfordAlvina chapter 1 . 9/8
이렇게 私たち自身のアーカイブ êrîşî
ThrashYer chapter 1 . 9/8
આ ફેશનમાં Archivo propio pris d'assaut
Rosazul66 chapter 2 . 7/21
Well... The idea is good. Obviously, you have read Throne of Glass, because that girl reminds me of Celaena. I would advise you to be careful; Celaena is nice, but you are making an original character, not a crossover.

Try to avoid adding flashbacks or backstory before page 10 (like, chapter 5, maybe). You want the reader to like the character, to identify with him or her before you put your character through hell ;)

Also, you should check tips for separating paragraphs. It really hard to read and understand your text because your paragraphs are randomly separated. Remember, you should start a new paragraph when ypu change time, place, topic or character. If you start talking about the future, that's a paragraph break. If the next scene happens in a different environment, that's another paragraph break. Same if a different character starts to speak, or if he/she begins to talk about a different topic altogether.

Btw, you can find very good bettas in the Fanfiction community. They can help you to edit your chapters and improve your writing. :)
Odeveca chapter 2 . 7/21
yes love to see what you have in store for this :)
Odeveca chapter 1 . 7/21
very lovely story, interesting :)