Reviews for Undying Love
Guest chapter 1 . 7/22/2018
Welcome, young one, to the TiPo fandom!
Originality is key in a successful fanfic.
Try and stay separate from the usual crowd, but don't forget your roots.
Try a little twist. It'll make your story better and more interesting from other monotone fanfic that use the same combination of writing that makes their stories predictable, bland, and boooooooring.
John Reese Himself chapter 1 . 7/24/2018
Second chapter is dar better than the first one. Keep going pal
Pixlexic-President chapter 2 . 7/24/2018
It was cute, keep it up
Tipofan4life chapter 2 . 7/23/2018
hope y'all like this!
Tipofan4life chapter 1 . 7/23/2018
for those of y'all that speak Spanish can y'all interpret plz my Spanish isn't goof
Guest chapter 1 . 7/21/2018
jaja por que no creo que tigresa lo deje de estanpar jaja digo de bueno este no se haaa
Tipofan4life chapter 1 . 7/22/2018
Thanks guys for the encouragement and criticism yeah I've seen that pattern too but I don't see how to do it any other way and I'm sure shifu would really approve maybe y'all can help me change things up.
John Reese Himself chapter 1 . 7/22/2018
Welcome to the fandom! Nice first story BUT this is the problem when you pick TiPo oneshot. I can re-call almost the same scenarios in 50 other stories od this kind. I mean the concept repeats itself
Look:
-Po likes Tigress after Gongman
-to shy to tell her
-Shifu encourages him
-Shifu has a father talk to him and gives them their blessing
-Po eventually tells her

And I se this pattern all over this fandom
It's getting bland but this is your first story and I am looking forward to reading your stories in the future.

Please don't take this the wrong way, I wasn't hating on you I was just telling you few stuff because I assume you are here only for few months now as you said that this is your first story. You are a talented writer...keep going
Pixlexic-President chapter 1 . 7/21/2018
First of all, welcome to the kfp fandom! We're always happy to see new writers because this archive is dying.
About the story, it was awesome for your first try :) There were just too many unnecessary exclamation marks, try using full stops more often. But the story was totally awesome, I will wait for the next chapter. Be awesome ;)
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