Reviews for Undying Love |
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![]() ![]() Welcome, young one, to the TiPo fandom! Originality is key in a successful fanfic. Try and stay separate from the usual crowd, but don't forget your roots. Try a little twist. It'll make your story better and more interesting from other monotone fanfic that use the same combination of writing that makes their stories predictable, bland, and boooooooring. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Second chapter is dar better than the first one. Keep going pal |
![]() ![]() ![]() It was cute, keep it up |
![]() ![]() ![]() hope y'all like this! |
![]() ![]() ![]() for those of y'all that speak Spanish can y'all interpret plz my Spanish isn't goof |
![]() ![]() jaja por que no creo que tigresa lo deje de estanpar jaja digo de bueno este no se haaa |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks guys for the encouragement and criticism yeah I've seen that pattern too but I don't see how to do it any other way and I'm sure shifu would really approve maybe y'all can help me change things up. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Welcome to the fandom! Nice first story BUT this is the problem when you pick TiPo oneshot. I can re-call almost the same scenarios in 50 other stories od this kind. I mean the concept repeats itself Look: -Po likes Tigress after Gongman -to shy to tell her -Shifu encourages him -Shifu has a father talk to him and gives them their blessing -Po eventually tells her And I se this pattern all over this fandom It's getting bland but this is your first story and I am looking forward to reading your stories in the future. Please don't take this the wrong way, I wasn't hating on you I was just telling you few stuff because I assume you are here only for few months now as you said that this is your first story. You are a talented writer...keep going |
![]() ![]() ![]() First of all, welcome to the kfp fandom! We're always happy to see new writers because this archive is dying. About the story, it was awesome for your first try :) There were just too many unnecessary exclamation marks, try using full stops more often. But the story was totally awesome, I will wait for the next chapter. Be awesome ;) |