|Reviews for The Emerald Phoenix|
| jimmy.oz chapter 10 . 3/17
With his telepathy the way it is he can actually please the girls together if he wanted. thought about this last chapter but forgot about it by the end of it to make the comment lol. well as long as nothing stops his teleporting then he can leave with them easily. well i will stop for not and look forward to more updates. keep up the good work.
| jimmy.oz chapter 9 . 3/17
Wonder if any other girls or women are going to join his harem lol. also maybe he can't heal all might because he doesn't know the anatomy for it like arms. well either way keep up the good work.
| jimmy.oz chapter 8 . 3/17
Well it is good that he is able to heal more with his quirk wonder if he will be able to heal all might at some point if he learns enough. momo is going to be op even if i feel like izuku should still be able to power through anything in mha if he used his powers right even if they aren't the cosmic phoenix powers. keep up the good work.
| jimmy.oz chapter 7 . 3/17
Even though i feel like the heroes of this world are pretty much failures most of the time i did like how the whole all might visage appeared behind him like that. wonder if he will ever get to the point where the fire wont hurt him like that. keep up the good work and need more chapters.
| jimmy.oz chapter 6 . 3/17
Too be honest feel like izuku should use that dangerous fire of his but then again i believe he is wasting his psychic powers the way he does lol. still a good story though but does need more updates.
| jimmy.oz chapter 3 . 3/16
Feel like izuku could have won a lot easier with his powers in many different ways. i am glad though he wasn't fighting against bakugo since that pretty much always happens. well keep up the good work.
| jimmy.oz chapter 2 . 3/16
I could be wrong but i feel like camie is more stacked than momo lol. surprised they have two extra students in the class and figured mineta would have been in class 1b. well not that it matters keep up the good work.
| jimmy.oz chapter 1 . 3/16
If it had been the phoenix force from marvel then he would have no need for one for all. hell even the powers from the physic in mob 100 or even one punch man are op compared to one for all in my opinion. well story looks interesting. needs more updates though and i am curious who will get one for all though.
| Guest chapter 11 . 3/6
Need a new chapter
| Guest chapter 11 . 3/6
This Izuku vs overhaul would be legendary!
| superxeno03 chapter 3 . 3/3
your writing is just so enjoyable all your fics are just, so fun to read, but this has to be my most favorite of all your works and ive only gotten three chapters in
| Ganheim chapter 7 . 2/18
blood poured gently from his wounds
[Poured implies a lot of movement, I think you intend ‘wept’ which is still quite a step for a tanky character]
You’re a villain! You attacked us! I did what I had to
[Bakugou’s got a point, they weren’t hesitating to use lethal force and twice in other fights you show or mention others’ willingness to use lethal force in response. If he picked her up and continued punching her I could see him drawing horror from the others, but I would think that blast would look from their perspective like a last-ditch attempt which he couldn’t control. He’s definitely more villainous than the rest of the hero classes, but she doesn’t start begging and he mock her for the others to rally against him. The situation would incline them all to look on him with worry, but I don’t see room for much else when they’ve still got to rally with other heroes. It’s ironic that he’s usually wrong for going too far, but in this instance he’s RIGHT that he did what he had to against others with the advantage of position, numbers, unrestrained force and surprise]
Even if he’s powerful, he should be more mindful of it
[It took re-reading this page twice to understand the scene, you jump in AFTER several events happen, namely Todoroki blasting the zone with ice, but don’t describe that for several paragraphs. That forces reading down, then back up]
He looked like he was carryi- Hagakure
some of the characters just aren't that interesting and it was hard making good fights for them
[The larger the cast, the more opportunities you have but the harder it is to flesh them out and keep/make them interesting. Even thick tomes with tons of characters like Romance of the Three Kingdoms has only a handful of characters at a time. Go for what you think you can work well]
The couple of small typos or things can slip through for anyone, but I'm seeing signs of preconceived ideas on the part of the author without always building them up in-scene, the prime one in this chapter people treating Bakugou like a maniac when he fought alongside others and seems fully in the right given the bad situation villains put them in. Hell, Momo saturates an area with gattling fire and that's praised for badass when she potentially put even more lives at risk. They're fighting against villains who aren't giving them a choice in the matter, both of them based on their actions in-chapter should have earned them thanks.
| OshiroHonzo chapter 3 . 1/27
God, this is painful. The battle with Izuku against both Kaminari and Momo was painful to read. Seriously, it was far too forced. Izuku is smarter than. Me have powers. Me fight head on. Me fight like All Might. All he needed to do was ambush Kaminari with the tape and he would win. He could have easily taped kirishima once he was down too! Yet, he didn't and turned to walk away. It is the least likely thing he would do unless his power reduces his wisdom/intellect stat for more power. Then the fight with Momo. He should have been relatively uninjured and not tired if he did things like he was supposed to. (No offense on that. But seriously, him turning his back to Kaminari is a big no-no.) He shouldn't even had a diffuclt time with Momo. Especially with his tie sword that cut a giant robot in half and created a canyon. Sure, he won't go all out but it should have been relatively easy to cut the staff in half. Furthermore, he could have easily disarm her at any point with his telekinetic power too. Just keep her cornered and she wouldn't have been able to make any comeback.
... I'm thinking too much. Well, I guess I deserve to suffer for not just enjoying the story than thinking of how Izuku could have done better.
| rogue1Bois chapter 11 . 1/22
please make more badassery Midoria... this is easily top 5 in my list of over 400 stories on this site
| rogue1Bois chapter 11 . 1/22
gawd dam this is good stuff... cant wait for more author