I think this is an interesting idea, if you ever decide to fully develop it into a story I'd be interested in reading it. I would recommend proofreading, but overall I'd be up for more.

Beautiful. it would be nice if they met the forerunners too.

Thanks I like it

This could be good, but there are way to many errors to get a flow. Would suggest getting a beta reader

Lots of spelling mistakes but besides that’s great story update soon

Sweat

The plot is good, but the grammar and punctuation need massive improvement. I've trouble determining if some sentences are speeches or not, and there seem to be missing commas and full stops throughout the chapter.

The plot line seen very interesting, hope that you can develop more this story.

It's a nice one shot, but there are a lot of errors. That made it a little bit hard to read.