I just had caught up I've been a long time fan was reading before you took your first break cant wait for you to come back and hopefully out an end to this truly amazing story. Keep up the good work and hopefully you come back soon

Hi Grae, sorry for the bad writing, but English is my second language and I'm not very advanced. I wanted to ask you. Since you said in the last chapters that you were writing your book, what's it called? I'd like to buy it, although I wouldn't read it much, mainly because I'd have to have the translator by my side. But at least to help you continue writing, which I'm obsessed with. Thank you very much, and good luck with your writing.

just when you get to the good part

The Acromantula's could have all been easily dealt with by Harry simply using Fiendfyre, It is a curse literally meant for widespread destruction. It would have absolutely no trouble burning every single one of those spiders to Ashes the only thing he would have to do is make Sure the flames only go after the spiders and consider in his strength of will you should not have a problem doing that. I do hate when riders make a situation more complicated than necessary when the solution to the problem is not only easy the protagonist already is capable of that Simple and easy solution he has all of voldemort's memories you're telling me that he doesn't know how to use Fiendfyre and how to perfectly control it?

Really wizards have an aversion to pain how does something that stupid even make sense to you when you wrote that c***? The amount of things that you see with us in which is doing that is extremely painful and the first freaking book alone is ridiculous I don't know what world you live in but the mother world does not involve that much danger for mubbles in daily life so I think you need to look at who have an aversion to paint cause a certain if not wizards and witches that would be muggles. Also I'm pretty sure we've lived in which is with no the importance of being physically fit considering doing requires physical fitness and a lot of endurance.

I agree there was definitely another way to remove The soul fragment from Harry scarf because he wasn't even a proper soul anchor he was an accidental one voldemort's so fragment just latched on to Harry in order to save itself it merely performed the same function as a Horcrux. But it's obvious from the books that domodor had already planned to sacrifice Harry in order to solve the problems he knew what the scar was he said it in the first books when professor mcgonagall asked him if he could remove it and he said no he wouldn't even if he could because scars can come in handy. So he already said hurry up for everything I mean perfect example he brought Harry to the dazzlies before Sirius was even arrested. And he knew that serious was Harry's Godfather and yet right then and there he just broke a whole bunch of laws just so he could manipulate harry.

Another dead story. Unfortunate

The situations you keep engineering for Harry just feel farcical. Oh, a task isnt enough. He must also have a trial, and be forced into an arena for stupid rules, will probably be interfered with in some way, and now goblin assassins are running amok in the crowd.

Lol, the goblin referring to himself as a dark goblin.

Him being at the far end of the arena from the dragons, levitating up high, and still getting sniped constantly just so you can have him injured for some grandstanding or heroic triumph later? I realize some things in storytelling are just formulaic, but this is way too forced. Ive seen storywriting patterns like this, where so much shit is heaped onto the MC, just so he can be a little ball of rage later and show the world how wrong they are for fucking with him, with everyone involved a caricature of real people. I hope I am wrong, but I suspect not.

Yeah, sad to say, but this chapter lost me. Its like the author came up with a bunch of ideas, and felt they had to use them all rather than the one that worked best.

Oh, yep, he exploded his rage all over.

I feel like this idea that the next thing that Harry goes through needs to top the last is actively harming your story.

Honestly, Im of a mind with Draco on this. Let the man have a good session of raging at the world and contemplating the misery of life if he wants. You can talk to him when he is ready to talk. All this fluttering about and whingeing over his feelings is getting to me.

Hey, what happened to Moody? He seemed to be teaching after Barty was caught. Why is Umbridge suddenly here?

I feel authors often intentionally write do-gooders to purposefully misconstrue self-defense that results in death as murder, just for drama.

Oh lord, the diminutives have begun.

Bro, why dont you just fiendfyre Dumbledore's office if you think the diary is in there? Seems simple as shit to me. The horcruxes all are quite noticeable when they die, so confirmation wouldnt be an issue. And fiendfyre would surely break any protections in there, including a fidelius on any hiding spot. It would eat the magic of the charm.

"Though as radiant as ever, she gave the impression of comfort, rather than luxurious beauty, and it was the first time his body urged, willed his limbs to move forward, embrace this exquisite anomaly, and kiss her. Within that moment, meeting her plump pink lips to his somehow transcended the physical need and felt more akin to spiritual guidance.
...To his surprise, delight, and dread, he felt himself take an unauthorized step forward, bringing half an arm's length between them down to mere inches away from each other... ...It was then that he became slightly more aware of what could be, and how much of a risk this was. Harry closed his eyes, and despite doing it in front of her, took a measured and calming breath rather than leaning in those last few inches."

- So, it seems like he kissed her, but then didnt and retconned it? If you're kissing, you can't exactly do it from an arms length away, nor have much room to lean in if you're already leaned in and in contact. This entire sequence needs clarification, because it contradicts itself.

His logic when talking to fleur is like that of a child. 'Sorry, I cant put you first in my life because I have a mission, therefore I need to remain single or practice polygamy.' Like, what? If he tried to use the polygamy excuse to push her away, as if he wanted a polygamous relationship, thats one thing. But this makes no fucking sense. If you want Harry to come across as smart, and not just having this conversation so the author can write a harem in, I would adjust his approach in this conversation. Just have him say he wants more than one woman. Your reasoning in the A/N is solid. Why not do that?

"We might as well check on the carcass since the world isn't dire or anything." - dire doesnt work there. It needs an editing pass.

I still dont understand the psyche of this harry you have crafted. I think he needs more personal introspection moments in the story or something that help show us why he feels the way he does, as him just randomly having panic attacks like this just feels abrupt and out of place. Its as if he is fine most of the time, until you need to have him act out in a certain setting.

And yes, I do not understand the way you are trying to label this as shame, guilt, whatever. The need to flee that he is exhibiting comes from a fear of rejection, On a deeply personal level. Its a way of protecting oneself from emotional vulnerability. But its a fear of rejection by those you give a damn about, not necessarily everyone in that room. If this Harry is mentally sick enough that he feels deeply responsible in some way for what happened to those he loves prsent in that room in his past, then it should be showing in many other times and places in his life. Even if he doesnt run off all the time, his mental struggles should be communicated to the reader. As it is, he just comes off as crazy and I cannot relate at all to his behavior due to this lack of exploration of his struggle with his emotions in this regard.

Also, why the hell are so many people there for lunch? Bro just wanted to buy a couple things and 30 people showed up, including ones who dont even know him. Like seriously - I realize Krum likes Hermione but why the hell did he show up to a lunch with Flamel that didnt get arranged until like 30 minutes beforehand? How did he find out? Why are Zabini and the rest there? Why is Sirius there? Snape and Flitwick? Its like someone invited people for a surprise party or something, and included strangers, which is weird as fuck if youre concerned about someones wellbeing after spending a week in bed. This is a fucking clown show by whoever set this up.

Even Gabrielle is there? Wtf. Where are the parents? Ive seen no mention, and it makes no sense for her to randomly show since Fleur didnt bring her.

'He recognized the ball for what it was, a faint,' - feint

I think this Harry has serious problems setting boundaries. Hes a doormat to everyone.

Croissant Queen - Youre killing me here!

Why me? Groupies are perfect for doing your bidding. - sometimes Draco is hilarious.