This story is shit... When the MC isn't an idiot rapist, he complains about everything. Honestly could have been a good story, but the author totally fucked it up

More complaining... yay?

MC just keeps on complaining... ABOUT...FUCKING...EVERYTHING.
3 chapters in and all he has done is whine

Your MC so far in the 1st 2 chapters is honestly very annoying.

It’s still cool as hell

bro, yall should read this dude original work. its really f good

This was anwsome. Im not a fan of edey storys. but this was the right level of ede and soft, a damn hope you contine this story. , I might make my own skyrim story now. good look to life my man.

if you are not dead...

Always, you have an amazing writing skill, putting thoughts to paper that makes me envious.

I usually like your stories, but this MC was so hard to enjoy. Your MC seems to have things happen to them instead of him making things happen. He seems to blender into situation.

I like MC’s with no morals that will do whatever they wishes to whoever they wishes. So they were parts of the story that was enjoyable reading your MC. I don’t really understand what the MC goals were because it seems to have shifted constantly. Your character being overly cautious was actually a good thing in the beginning. The problem I had with it was he did nothing to increase his chances. A lot of his actions were half baked plan out of him being impulsive.

I think your MC had a lot of potential. The story was still enjoyable to read for the most part and I appreciate you giving us a chance to reading your writing.

Noooo it was going so well

This.. Ended up a lot better than I thought it would. An amazing sorry kudos to you auth!

could have had him use counjhered bow to kill and leave no evidence

fire story, but its a shame SLM no longer makes these

tftc

pathetic writing from pathetic author

...You WTF?!

I mean I saw the Leo thing coming power of imagination makes sense in that regard, I half expected Nakamura to jump ship because it's honestly the smart thing to do... but I did not that THAT SHIT AT THE END COMING WHAT THE FUC-?!