Snape's not a child or a prankster. He's a thinskinned excitable grump in canon, but his antipathies are played out in words not actions so locking someone in a closet as a prank seems really out of character to me. As you said, you really wanted to write a locked-in-the-closet scene so you shoe-horned it into your story and added a whole chapter to get it in.

J'espère que si je continue la lecture de cette histoire, je vais percevoir un vraie changement dans son comportement. Je comprends le souhait de l'auteur de ne pas faire d'OCC Severus pour qu'il devienne soudainement gentil mais lui mieux que quiconque doit savoir les conséquences et les effets d'un abus sur mineur surtout un mineur orphelin. Enfermer Harry dans l'armoire et le déguiser comme une blague est malsain comme ce que le parrain et le père d'Harry lui ont fait pendant ses années à Poudlard.
Pour l'instant, c'est mon avis comme je pense être une fanatique de fluffy et surtout de Severitus fluffy: Severus taking care of Harry.

Where's Hedwig and Harry's trunk?

Ppp

Snape and Harry are British. They would use uk terms. In the uk what Harry was shut in by snape was a wardrobe.
Your chapters are very short. The story is still developing so can’t really comment yet on the quality of the storyline.

This is so gooood

I feel ashamed to say I thought “deliverance” was a real word.
If it is i feel even more ashamed

This was great! Although the disaperating was incorrect. Canonly it’s very unpleasant. And feels like your chest is being constricted, so you can’t breath. (Lol I’m a huge Potter head and know most quotes and rules most people forgot existed)

I was waiting for Harry to call the snake to help him (never mind that the cold would kill any non-magical snake).

Interesting. You may have created what were essentially Inferii before Rowling did. (I'm not clear on the dates of the books.)

Your writing so far indicated that Jeb was greedy for money and enjoyed hurting Harry. I saw (and want to see) no detectable sexual interest. Those who want to see it will, but I did not.

Of course hindsight is 20/20, but Harry could have placed his trunk so the closet door couldn't close.

Also of course, this fic has now been thoroughly canonshafted since we know that Snape can fly. He could easily fly up to some point on the mountain and levitate Harry up to that point, repeating until they reached their goal.

Thank you! I loathe slash and despise the authors who refuse to disclose it up front.

I have no right or desire to control what others create. I have both the right and the desire to control what I read.

What happened to Hedwig? She wasn't mentioned at all after Snape confronted Dursley.

Yes please write the sequel