|Reviews for A Rended Breath of Life
| Ranmaleopard chapter 1 . 3/24/2012
| Ranmayamabushi chapter 2 . 4/12/2011
dark but very good, I hope you continue this and that Ranma rips some heads off
| eddog2323 chapter 2 . 11/29/2010
not bad. When Hotaru get her Powers as Saturn. she get payback on Uranus and Neptune.
| Shadow.R.Chaos chapter 2 . 3/26/2010
Okay to start, Love the story, hella' dark but that held alot to the appeal. makes the story more real in that it isn't all wonderful surge coated life they live. do wish you luck with what every it is you are doing now, and hope that you one day return to writing as it is apparent you have a hella' lot of skill in it.
If you do have the NWC (my regards to who ever came up with that name for them) go up against the sailor scouts they're going to need something helping them, as the quote from Darkphoneix Moon is the equivalent of a Magical Howitzer. and if the Outer's were attacked the inners would help, add to it that Hotaru was possessed before they could be easily fooled into buying it again.
I do as well wonder about Pluto, with Hotaru in Ranma's hands now his innate chaos aura would likely make him, and by proxy anyone around him invisible to the times if you wanted to spin it that way. considering the curse is often looked at as chaos magic it's not a hard pill to shallow, just why would she not intervene sooner? unless she had seen that Hotaru was suppose to die in that ally and didn't see Ranma appear, there by making Hotaru invisible and Setsuna now thinking she's dead and gone.
Anyways I once again hope that you are able to come back to Writing this story one day but whatever mused this story in the first place isn't something as dark as this story, that happened to you.
Shadow R. Chaos
| Bree R chapter 2 . 9/10/2009
Quite out of character on the SM side...But wow very intriguing premise. I hope you continue it some day.
| Wrin chapter 2 . 5/10/2009
Wow! That is really good, but REALLY depressing! I hope you finish it one day!
| Lord Sia chapter 2 . 10/2/2008
Dark, sick, completely, stomach-turning, heartachingly revolting, I love it! True, it might be a bit sick, but these kind of stories remind me that there are people out there who do suffer this fate (and worse, disturbingly enough, there is always someone who's worse off and if there isn't, trust human cruelty to fix it sooner or later...). I do so want to see Ranma & Co pull a declaration of War on the Senshi. I can picture it, the whole NWC (Imagine Happosai's reaction! He may be a pervert, but he limits himself to those who can defend themselves and never past groping, and he does just about anything for children... Or Khu Lon; wonder what the Amazon's take on sexual abuse of children would be?) standing at a park in the middle of Juban calling out the Senshi to meet true Vengeance!
Maybe not, that is just the kind of cheese that makes it hard for me to write believable plotlines and stories, but the basic idea of the NWC being informed is frightening. Oh well, great fic, if depressing, it's like dark chocolat; bitter but just so... Delicious...
(Please give the Senshi, all of 'em, HELL! Or, the Outers being robbed of their powers and then facing the NWC. Tempting...)
| Prustan chapter 2 . 9/12/2008
Well, nuts. Another brilliant idea, that isn't going to be finished. Hotaru is going to need lots of help, and as much as Haruka and Michiru might be needed to help the Inners fight, they seriously need to die. As someone else said though, what is Pluto doing? If she was against it, she could have had Hotaru moved or Michiru punished (or both), and if she was for it, she could have prevented the escape.
Truthfully, I hope either the author updates, or someone else continues this brilliant start of a fic.
| Chris ShadowMoon chapter 2 . 4/15/2008
Whoa. I knew that the Outers were bitches, but this is the darkest I've ever seen. I want more dark stories that are Ranma/SM
| Lerris chapter 2 . 10/28/2007
well you've got the outer senshi severely out of their normal character, and the inner senshi clueless. Despite that, if you accepted these things you have a decent prologue, but you'd need more chapters for it to be a story in of itself.
| Chirishman chapter 2 . 6/22/2006
An amazing story. It still makes me cry a little. I never realized that I hadn't reviewed, but I guess I didn't have an account back then. A truly amazing piece of work. I wish Nighthawk would come back and finish though. Really a gem. Poor Hotaru though T-T
| Dumbledork chapter 2 . 6/22/2006
Excellent story. Too bad it's another one that will never be finished.
| Cloud1239999 chapter 2 . 5/16/2006
I like this story. A completely different outlook to the outers that I'd of never expected. A very interesting read. I just think that it's a shame that you haven't continued it from here. Anyways, Congratulations on the intriguing story.
| Jigoku no Yami chapter 2 . 4/13/2006
Very dark, but enjoyable. What will happen next? and who will Ranma be paired up with?
| Jigoku no Yami chapter 1 . 1/27/2006
When ya gonna update pal? I want to know what happens.