Reviews for You've Got to Use Silver |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome once again dude. Is Jaune some flavor of battle mage? Given everyone thinks it's strange that he can fight in the melee and use spells wouldn't that mean that particular style of mage is rare? |
![]() ![]() ![]() You should give Jaune magic like from the sword skills from Sword Art Online in Alfiem as they are simply covering their weapons with magic and you can name it the aincrad style like Kirito did in Sword Art Online 3. And if you consider my idea then will one-hand swordman or a duel-weilder like Kirito. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loving the vibes i am getting from this story and i cant wait to see how it unfolds |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great so far keep it up man! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Alright man you bloody sold me with this one. Is Jaune some flavor of magic knight, considering he is apparently not a paladin here like he kinda is in canon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I actually really living this it’s really good please keep going! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Maybe jaune new ability could be like escanor sunshine or gawain numeral of the saint or prana bust (flame) to make him into the ultimate vampire killer PS. I absolutely love this story and hope you can update it soon and not trying to sound demanding or anything just speaking |
![]() ![]() ![]() Quite good chapter and nice world building. Good work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Gender, Ozpin says. That means that Jaune could sneak into the girls' area and claim to identify as a girl. Gender is identity, sex is physiological. It's the perfect loophole! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Considering Jaune killed a vampire and everyone else is apparently unable to but arrogant enough to think they can judging by how they talk about it, I think Anthony's previous chapter comment about Jaune being better than him is a reference to Jaune's apparent ability to overcome challenges that should be far out of his league. Which is fitting for both Skyrim and The Witcher. A man with a sharp piece of metal and some flashy parlor tricks against world-ending abominations and wins anyway. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is really good so far! And I think you meshed your other fic's OC in well. |
![]() ![]() I like this fic mostly by would urge you to reconsider the use of your Anthony OC. For on he doesn't have the color naming scheme that would be held by children of Jaune's generation. Adults are better able to get away with it, but in an AU fic you damage your readership potential because it can give readers the impression that he's a self-insert. Have OC's of such makeup can work in self-insert fics that are specifically about the OC in question, but only in a fish-out-of-water context. Your story however focuses upon Jaune specifically so you lose the justification for having a lore-breaking OC being given such prominence, which lead to accusations of him being a self insert. Give him a color name or I guarantee you that you'll face such accusations in the future. also, in au fics creating main cast ocs when aus are generally meant to explore how the original cast would function in a different genre/universe is generally frowned upon in most communities. Ask yourself if Anthony actually contributes anything to a RWBY AU or if he's better suited for a piece of original fiction. If you think he does you should next ask yourself- does he actually need to play as prominent a role in the story as I initially thought or is better served to flesh out Jaune's background, and remain out of focus. You should ask yourself- does Anthony, or any other oc I have, grossly break the lore or spirit of a rwby fanfic (going back to the issue of the name you chose for him). If you read Ryuugi's The Game's We Play (ie the original RWBY gamer fic, and one of the best period of all fandoms) or Coeurs Forged Destiny you can probably see where Anthony might be a problematic character for you down the road and might way the story down. Know that I'm not saying this belittle you. I actually like this story and think it has great potential. But people are going to ask hese questions and they might drop your fic over the character. Do as you will, it's your story, but I figured someone needed to warn you before some less diplomatic reviewer starts trashing your writing because of the issues I mention. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Quite cool chapter, trough i hope for more details in next fights. I'm curious to know more about the magic system of this world and other skills, but please, don't make Jaune a freaking harem protagonist. Good work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() What about bedivere noble phantasm from fate grand order |
![]() ![]() I’m loving this story so far. Good chapter |