You like Percy too much. You are diminishing Jason way too much and showing him as very weak.

So when Tony died, it said a arrow got him in his throat. But this chapter, it says a arrow got him in his heart. Not hating on the story, because I've read it multiple times, but wanted to point that out.

So Percy kills a Titan and becomes a centurion. While Reyna didn't do shit and became praetor. How the fuck that happens?

LOVE THIA

wtf does he mean the mess percy caused? hello?! literally everyone decided to air out his secrets in front of everyone! how in the actual fuck is that his fault?

also god damn this story is literally just "shit on percy, the story" isnt it?

i know this story is quite finished already but as multiple people have reviewed about, Percy just seems useless as he is now in terms of strength and survivability.

idk if it gets explained at any point but the fact that Percy almost was crippled for life against a sea creature that wouldnt have even come close to doing that much damage to him unless it KILLED HIM is very bad for the story unless you plan to make him get much stronger soon.

You even admitted to adding in the healing from Neptune as an excuse to make it so Percy couldnt ever see his father again :V even if that was a joke it was kinda in poor taste considering the fact the only reason it was necessary was because of how week the characters are in this story _

The fact that in canon the water would have been able to heal a majority of his wounds from the fight AS WELL AS the whip scars from Gabe is just a big example of how wildly underpowered these characters are, considering Percy himself would be absolutely destroyed by basically any of the titans bar MAYBE Prometheus at the state he is at in the story.

like i said its already well too late to complain about this but i dont see this story going very well especially depending on however you end up fixing this issue, assuming you even do.

(also apologies for how harsh this may sound but i dont think you at any point mention this story having the characters scaled down so there is no reason why Percy would have been near crippled by something far weaker than most foes he's fought against canonically, much less to the point his father would need to be barred from ever seeing him again due to his healing being one of the only ways to have him healed. WHY DIDNT APOLLO DO IT?!)

how is reyna even there? didn't she go to camp jupiter because percy destroyed cerces island at 13? and in this, percy isnt even 13 yet.

yea, way to ruin the fvcking mood. i cant talk tho. my first kiss was underneath a fvcking bridge while it was raining and i tripped and pulled both of us into the rain.

WELL, THIS IS FVCKING FIRE

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UPDATE

i dont understand why jason isnt stronger than percy in terms of lightning strikes as jason is the son of jupiter and percy is only the son of someone with the title (not domain) of stormbringer. this is the only thing that irritates me of this story thus far, which meant that you did a wonderful job in every other aspect.

i feel like terminus wouldnt care and would still be whiny about no weapons past the promerian line

“the other twenty” reminds me of “HAMILTON WROTE THE OTHER (i forgo how many

Well time to reread this awsome series