|Reviews for Who Stops You|
| J chapter 1 . 9/30
I wanted to read this, I really did but I had to stop almost midway through because the grammar was horrible. I get english may not be your first language but I encourage you to have someone who has a stronger grasp of the language proof read this and republish it. To top that off with what I read here and there it was moving way too fast. Not enough build up on character background to sufficiently convince the reader as to why a character says or does certain things.
All in all it was too cheesy and just not my kind of story. I didn't enjoy it but thank you none the less for attempting and I hope you take some of this criticism into account for the next fic you write.
| wolf970 chapter 1 . 9/30
I like the story great start.
| Ronin Kenshin chapter 1 . 9/30
this is hard to read but has potential good start
| dkentjensen chapter 1 . 9/30