ngl it said A/N but for a moment the oassion got me and i thought thr pov of some new scientist character was being introduced lol then last paragraph went out in the usual A/N expectations.
Funny thought, imagine:
Quillpraying* i hope you're safe wherever you are Nathan
Nathan: yeh man, wassup Pete, been a while ain't it?
Quill: WTF! who's out there messing with my mind.
Nathan: ayo man chill, thought you show more gratitude having your prayers answered, most ppl would be. huh... what did i expect ofc you'd be disrespectful to a god.
Quillwait WHAAT a Go-
Nathanoh yeh send me offerings btw, how can you not congratulate your bro for achieving Godhood. Better pick well who knows i might even bless you...a bit.
Quill: Dang the boredome is real since i now got myself an imaginary Nathan who thinks he is a god... i miss my bro whose delusional tendancies were fun and not worrying *sigh*

yeh that would be hilarious

Really great. Thanks for writing this.

I see a lot of complaints on ffn and Ao3. I'm just saying i think this story is great, and i loved the fight with Galacta.

Soo, Galacta is already worm infected huh? Or pregnant? It's her way of being pregnant technically, isn't it?
... I'm putting it out there: The worm will also absorb Nathan's Divinity and come out as the technical kid of both of them.
Lets see if I'm right :p

Yep... And it got stupid... Imp

Galacta might be ur fav... But honestly it was stupid to put her in like this... Heck his whole godhood was not really interesting...

I liked him better as the guy who stalked and broke in houses and then helped people... Not sure what this has now become...or how stupid it has become...

This is so fucking ridiculous like seriously this whole situation, with Galacta and Nathans godhood its just a mess and really needs a rework.

hhhb a shit ton of things deal with the soul, quite literally the baskcs of magic in marvel/MCU is understanding it and spirituality to be able to connect it with the enegys of the multiverse.

Why did you just repeat the antagonist unteractikn with Tony even after having him point out how what he did was wrong/how he could of gone about it betger.

Alices capabilities are To advanced for what she is or at the very least the size of her storage and everything etc (beads).
- what i would do is have a full server be located in his ship/base then have a portable relay.
- decreasing her actual processing power if she is to just remain as some wrist band.

The element that Tony made from his fathers research IS Uru just a different formula/less refined version of it.

Gali’s includion is so fucking bullshit and unnecessary but also she just comes out of left field.
One thing i just dont get is that your willing to create/include AU moments or things from the comics but will stick almost religously to the cinematic universe even though there has been so many terrible writing decisons made with it over the years.

Why are you trying to include everything from the MCU?
Make it your own, use more of the marvel comics to make a better story dont rely and force yourself to accomadate poorly made trash.

Your interpretation of Odin really needs some work hes not some paranoid over the top tyrannical figure.
- For instance one of the reasons he didnt tell Loki of his heritage wasn’t because he didnt love him ir whatever it was because he loved him too much.

- he planned to raise him and thor together then have Loki become king of the ice giants finally bringing true peace between their people but he knew that if he were to reveal his heritage he would eventually have to send him away to suffer.

Related to Hestia why would he be ‘related’ to her and the Olympians their is nothing in his powers that comes from them or at the very least enough that would give them a ‘greater claim’.
Its just kinda stupid, trying to make him one of the Olympians when literally the inly mystical thing he has done with them is use some of their runes and make a forge.
- if you want to have that connection you need to build it first, create a conneciton and motief for his powers/usage of them.

Please dont tell me he can make something as powerful as his weapon without even trying or thinking about, that would be way to match of a power jump

The power jump is way to much just the ability to sense reality on a such a scale is bullshit particularly because there was no build up or meaning.

Seriously what the actual fuck is this chapter, why the hell would you even make him a god Like That and as well as That powerful.

The whole situation with the throne and ascension was super forced.
It feels like the only reason it was added was because of the rule of cool, like oo thats a cool idea lets just add it.
- The big issue is that everythkng that happened wasn’t something the characters did or caused, it just happened like some deus ex machina.
- If your going to add something so monumental/big you have to build up to it you cant just be like ‘oh yeah hes an actual god now’ there needs to be more.
- Theres also the issue of it being To powerful in how it effected reality so much

Was grinning like a loon this chapter.
I will say though its rather frustrating that you decided to include captain marvel and the events of her movie.
As theres a lot of issues with That movie from a writers perspective particularly in a world as large as marvel/the mcu

Missed oppertunity with Thor, not talking to him and learning about Asgard and their ways.

I’d recommend a rework to not make everything so rushed and lack direction while we’re waiting for ‘The Avengers’.

The changing of how Allspeak works feels a bit hamstringed just so Nathan can have this cool new thing that makes it easier for him/you to explain why he can understand different languages.
Should of just had Nathan already have experience with something similar but weaker then have him interact with thor for a bit maybe after or before he regains his powers, just having a discussion and stuff then learns a thing or two.

Dialogue couldbuse a bit of work, most conversations people are just saying stuff without trying to convey anything or goal in mind from their perspective and writing perspective.

The forging/enchanting process was a bit weird as well, very ahhh random i guess a lot of different things thrown in without explanation or meaning (either a mystical meaning or why hes wanting it that way),
Then there was the naming/sentience/weird godly being christening its birth… just to left field,if you wanted to included a more higher powers influence before any blatant appearances you need to forshadow it and slowly increase their influence until an actual appearance.

Something ive notice you have a tendency to make half of every chapter AU notes or recaps.
Id suggest wither increasing the length of chapters or decreasing how much extra stuff you add on top to a chapter

Yet another good chapter.

The biggest issue with this chapter and as well with Wakanda is how he just shows up, it feels like the scene was written without any actual goal in mind.
- if Nathan wanted to help Tony then there are much better implied ways he could of gone about it without appearing psycho that could of built trust.
- Nathan needs a bit mkre aim and direction after almost 30 years in this world he should of cone up with a plan of some kind

Chi by itself is life giving as long as its not corrupted it won’t cause immediate damage.
We know from the comics and several shows/movies in the MCU that if Chi is applied by another without any controled effect it will naturally try to heal/energise the recipient .