|Reviews for Life after the War|
| darkone 500 chapter 2 . 4/18/2003
dude that was ficken sweat i want more swo keep writing
| son of vegeta chapter 2 . 4/17/2003
Hn... So far you've got a fairly intriguing storyline. Your style is pretty good, and you easily get your point across about this being a story of intrigue and whatnot, with a definite "love" undertone (what with the Shiro/Aina deal and all). Just make sure to write longer chapters, as many people don't like uber-short ones (I try to keep mine between 6 and 10 pages in MS Word 10-point font per chapter).
Something to watch out for in the future, though, is the possibility of generating plot holes within the original UC storyline. What I mean is, Shiro was wanted for abandoning his post, stealing the Ez8 (he quit the military, and then took it to fight the Apsalus), and responsibility for the destruction of the Ez8 and the Apsalus (which the Feddies had hoped to capture, not destroy). Shiro was a wanted man and in all likelihood stayed in hiding with Aina in the jungles of southeastern Asia for more than a year.
Anywho, keep on posting chapters. I'd like to see where this story is going.